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Mike
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0 posted 2001-04-02 11:43 PM



I sought out proof of human worth,
Upon this orb, we call our earth,
The answer lay, there all the while,
Within the joy, of small child's smile.

© Copyright 2001 Mike - All Rights Reserved
Honeybee
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1 posted 2001-04-02 11:46 PM



Oh yes!  How true!  Such beauty in few words!  

Take care,
Melissa~

RMW
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2 posted 2001-04-03 12:15 PM


Mike...echoing what Melissa said. Plus...thanks.  Bob
Irish Rose
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3 posted 2001-04-03 05:59 AM


yes, a child's smile.....how wonderful

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


CatLover
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4 posted 2001-04-03 11:20 AM


Mike,
Very nice. And so true. I was wondering though why you didn't use "...a small child's smile.

I see the 8 count but the addition of the word 'a' makes a better read grammatically and the added syl is allowed occasionally - and though this isn't a long piece, I think that rules can apply here.  Just my opinion. Give it a thought if you wish.

Anyway, I truly liked this and am so glad I cam ein to give it a look see.  Cat

[This message has been edited by CatLover (edited 04-03-2001).]

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5 posted 2001-04-03 11:23 AM


"A child is God's way of saying He hasn't given up on humanity yet."

Beautiful words, Mike.

Mabel A. Dilley
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6 posted 2001-04-03 02:34 PM


Triple support for the message herein. Wonderful quatrain.

"I am not now that which I have been."

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