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Finality of Decision....A Woman Makes Her Own Peace....Does the Gentleman Answer? |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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ahh..this felt good to write...any suggestions on this will be fine. I'm was thinking of putting it in CA, but I chickened out..*sticks out tongue* Hope ya'll like it. :supergrins: Her Plea... Sir, don't you see me standing here On Love's cloaked wings I now, you near? Sir, I calm myself here in your grace Though Love's broke tears I you, must face Sir, faithful am I to attend your fears That Love's not lost I now, dry tears His answer... Lady, I see you kneeling here, Offer now your hands, no fear. I take them see, press to my face Warm, your palms, your love embrace. And although faithful, I am not Tend me fairly, the moment, hot. Her resolve and acceptance of his... Sir, you have me now before you, What would you beg for me to do. Kiss your lips, oh but would You then forgive me, if I could? Faithless, sir, I do inquire What of me, do you desire? Thrust forth your arms, oh let me in Devoured trusted, you are my sin. A lady does not ask or require An ungentlman's touch to quench her fire, But mostly I have lost as much My lady fairness and softness such. I ask you now to free with me Let my love enough for you be. Sever from me to another if you must, But always know me, I'm in your trust. And when her kingdom flag for the night has fallen, Come desperately then to me, your sullen, Mistress of the night, once scorned Lady, in a disguise well worn. I love you now, tomorrow too Loves not lost, I'm ever true. We're sorry..this heart has been d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d. Should you like to hold the line we'll be glad to reconnect you.. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Temptress, a poetic masterpiece well written! write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Kethry, I do thank you for sure!  An honor to have you reading my work.  still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is superb. . . I love it. . . it flows wonderfullly. . . and reads great. . . this is one of the best things that I've seen you write. . . great job. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
nice passion play... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Thanks everyone. I'm glad you all enjoyed this little piece. As I said, it felt good to write. Thanks again. still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
Very well written, I like it. Sensual and keeps you wanting to read more. Red |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Jenn, a very talenter piece!! I would only suggest the following, (this is great) Her Plea... Sir, don't you see me standing here On Love's cloaked wings I now, you near? Sir, I calm myself here in your grace Though Love's brokeN tears AND I TO YOU, MUST FACE Sir, faithful (AM) I (TO) attend your fears That Love's not lost I now dry tears His answer... Lady, I see you kneeling here, Offer now your hands, no fear. I take them see, press to my face Warm, your palms, your love embrace. (NO COMMA) And although faithful, I am not Tend me fairly, the moment, hot Her resolve and acceptance of his... Sir, you have me now before you, What would you beg (FOR)me to do. Kiss your lips, oh but would You then forgive me if I could? Faithless, sir, I do inquire What of me, do you desire? Thrust forth your arms, oh let me in Devoured trusted, you are (MY) sin. A lady NEVER SHOULD REQUIRE An ungentlman's touch to quench her fire, But mostly I have lost as much My lady fairness and softness such. I ask you now to free with me Let my love enough for you be. Sever from me (TO ANOTHER) if you must, But always know me, I'm (IN)your trust. And when her kingdom flag for (THE) night has fallen, Come desperately (THEN) to me, your sullen, Mistress of the night (NO COMMA) once scorned Lady, in a disguise well worn. I love you now, tomorrow too Loves not lost, I'm ever true. I only offer a few punctuation changes and deleted in parenthesis- I truy love this! Kathleen Blake |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Kathleen. Thank you. This is better than putting it in CA. LOL! Which, like I said, I have a yellow streak about. I will look at it, and probably revise it in my notebook. Thanks again. I do appreciate your honesty.still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
this is a discourse - you can take great pride in - phenomenal perception - 5 *'s (at least!) |
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