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Their Laughter....My Tears
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Their Laughter....My Tears |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 Drawn to them...the couple in the back of the room Looking so in love...like brand new roses in bloom I couldn’t help but envy them as I watched the scene They had not a care in the world...so sweetly serene He looked at her...like she’s the only one there Gently pushing back a golden lock of her silken hair He leaned into her laughter like it was his saving grace Touching her hand so tenderly...as if made of fragile lace She glows under his gaze like stars on heaven’s floor Basking under his smile...she couldn’t help but adore She hangs on every word as if her life depends Praying silently...that this is the fairy tale that never ends He feels his heartbeat quicken as the dinner draws to a close Reaching to his pocket...he wonders if she knows He pulls the velvet box from it’s hiding place As he searches for the answer upon her lovely face She quiets the butterflies dancing in her heart Recording every moment....the moment “forever” will start She feels the room disappear and only sees him Happiness fills her heart to the very brim He wants this moment to be perfection Vanished is the speech he practiced to his reflection He offers her the stars above...and nothing less The response...a teary....breathless... “Yes” I watched them embrace...joined the others in their cheers The vision of them blurred under my tears I left quietly...as their laughter cut me to the bone For tonight I truly knew the emptiness...of alone |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
A lovely bittersweet poem. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
You tell this story of loneliness so well.... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ Oh, what a lovely, lovely write. 'He leaned into her laughter like it was his saving grace Touching her hand so tenderly...as if made of fragile lace' The imagery of this phrasing is exquisite. Oh, I know the ending's sad ... but the entire piece is such a pretty sad ... Lovely, poetess. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
We cannot know their future, but tonight is their night. May it last. Joyce |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, Oh sweetie, this hurts to read. So sad for you, yet so happy for them. I know how you feel my friend. Hang in there, sweet butterfly. Your time will come. Until then, take of you. ~BIG HUG~ your way. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
BDC, that was superb! Absolutely flawless, and a wonderful read. Although bittersweet, the overtones of the heart of the lonely far outweigh the happiness of the couple in my mind. So very touching but so sad. I hope this is not real life - but just in case, I send you a huge big old hug! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He looked at her...like she’s the only one there Gently pushing back a golden lock of her silken hair He leaned into her laughter like it was his saving grace Touching her hand so tenderly...as if made of fragile lace She glows under his gaze like stars on heaven’s floor Basking under his smile...she couldn’t help but adore She hangs on every word as if her life depends Praying silently...that this is the fairy tale that never ends ========================== Do we as poets, hopeless romantics and dreamers ... ever stop believing in happily ever after? tis the stuff inspiration is made of *S* and are ya trying to make me cry girlie??? This is a heartstring playing weave me butterfly sis and a cadence kissed beauty from your pen and the (...) are making me giddy LOL touching write Holly-girl, groovy graphic too  love ya me butterflybaby  It's such a clever innocence with which you show myself to me |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O butterflies~ this is sad, and is more resounding to my ears... since I am also in the phase of knowing "alone"... Thanks for the poem... Take Care, my friend, Regards, Sudhir |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
very beautiful and very sad...alone...sigh...is sometimes not a nice thing... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I think the last two lines define my life... watching and wondering in a wait that's never ending. This is superb! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
BDC, your poetry has grown leaps and bounds, since you first came to Passions - IMHO. The emotion bleeds through this piece beautifully. God, how I hate the feeling of "alone". Michael |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Oh, my baby Butterfly, just before we left for Texas, there were days and nights that you yearned for "aloneness". To be able to think and have the answers bounce off the empty room. I know this is a time of great changes and you are going through one of the hardest times of your life. You have written a beautifully haunting poem to share. You are a bouncer-backer and will look back on this some day as your growing time. Love and hugs, Butterflies Mom |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I know it too my friend. . . you will know that life again. . . this is one of your best. . .  ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Your writing never ceases to impress me, BDC. jwesley |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
PRMike~ Thank you so much for reading. Elizabeth~ A reply coming from you means so very much...thank you~ Marge~ Awe sweetie...thank you so much. Joyce~ It is truly an awesome sight to watch how forever begins. LW~ My friend...the weave allowed me to go where I had not...this scene only played in my heart and then to the page but alone is the same feeling no matter where it is felt. Hugs to you my friend..thankyou. Mysteria~ I'll take hugs no matter what Thank you for the very generous reply...I'm flattered.JM~ Oh....girlie..you are gonna make me cry...and that's not allowed!!! Love you sweets..you know what your words of praise mean to me and what your friendship means...thank you for friendship most of all. Sud~ My goodness I've missed you...thank you so much my friend...hope all is as you deserve it to be JB~ Sometimes it's not...and sometimes it's where you need to be to get to where you need to go....that made more sense before I wrote it out Thank you very much.Suthern~ Thank you dear Lady...may you never be alone again...smiles and happiness to you~ Michael~ YHO means ALOT to me...I've admired your work from the first moment I stepped into Passions...Thank you for your always honest comments...those are the only ones that matter dear poet~ Mom~ No saddness...it's just a weave But I know....I remember those days very very well....Thank you so much for being....You!Love you~ My thank-you's could never express how much each of you truly mean to me...how much it means to open my poetry and heart for you to look at and critique...thank you so much...for giving me a place to be "me"... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sven...sneaking through the cracks are ya! Thank you for the very kind comment~ JW~ It's an honor to be thought of so highly by you...I cherish your comments..thank you~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
"He leaned into her laughter like it was his saving grace touching her hand so tenderly...as if made of fragile lace I left quietly...as their laughter cut me to the bone for tonight I truly knew the emptiness...of alone" =============================== Oh Holly, you made me  with this bittersweet piece. I can not tell you how much this touched me, you have some beautiful lines in this, but I relate so much so to the final verse. Your writing keeps getting better and better, and every single poem that you have ever penned has touched me deeply! I pray that soon your tears will turn to laughter when your knight and shining armor carries you away Heck, I hope that happens to me soon too Take care, Melissa~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Melissa...don't wait for that Knight my friend...go out and hunt his tin butt down Thank you so much for always giving me a smile within your reply..it means more than I could ever say~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
*Bump!!* |
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