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Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

0 posted 2001-04-01 04:08 PM

Refresh Me

There were tears
within the
summer rains of youth.

So pleased I was
to see them concealed in
heaven's moisture,
that none would know them.

Too many storms
would cross the days of truth,
as thunder
boiled, snarled, threatened.

Cracked and chipped,
I am a
vase
of many words.

A flower in need of
water
and what is left,
grown stagnant.

Summer rains,
return
and freshen what is me.

Though petals fallen,
still left
are buds that long to blossom.

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Mabel A. Dilley
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 859
Seattle, WA, USA

1 posted 2001-04-01 04:21 PM

Very simply: this took my breath away. Such wonderful imagery. Such excellent writing.

"I am not now that which I have been."

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2001-04-01 04:37 PM

This is superb. It is beginning a message of the heart in me. I must escape just now, and allow it to unfold. The heart of your muse, in me, has taken hold.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2001-04-01 04:39 PM

Michael~
This is heartbreakingly stunning.

'Though petals fallen,
still left
are buds that long to blossom.'

~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-04-01 05:33 PM

Hauntingly beautiful. Nice imagery and writing.

LW

Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2001-04-01 08:52 PM

Michael--I like the way you used nature with emotion...well done, my friend.

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

6 posted 2001-04-01 10:09 PM

So very beautiful Michael, from such a lovely soul. Thank you.....Sue

Suetang

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