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spiked
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0 posted 2001-04-01 10:12 AM



The scales and thorns that burn my skin
The pain that turns from deep within
When all you think you know and feel
Goes far beyond what’s true and real
Contained in things that’s long since past
No longer can I reach the mast
To guide which way this wind shall blow
And take me where I wish to go
With no direction, I run aground
And sit here lost without a sound
No voice to say that alls ok
No hope to change the coming day
No storybook end to seal this dream
No one to decipher all that I mean
Translate the burs of which I write
And watch this day turn into night
I miss you more with each new day
And that I cannot change.

© Copyright 2001 Richard Rendall - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-01 10:17 AM


This was a painful read. Heartbreak is a very apt description...you can feel it in your chest and sometimes it hurts just to breathe. I could feel that through your words. Ouch.  
bslicker
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2 posted 2001-04-01 11:38 AM


When all you think you know and feel
Goes far beyond what’s true and real

Wow these are some key words for you to write.  The whole write is really based on that..  only my opinion..

Bernie Slicker

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3 posted 2001-04-01 01:41 PM


very sad!!!!!but enjoyed
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4 posted 2001-04-01 02:01 PM


rich......
new wings shall grow,& you shall fly
there shall be no limit to your sky
and found within the pain you feel
is a wonderful power that can heal
and the voice you long to hear
shall draw you close and hold you near
then when the days turn to night
they comfort you then lose their fright
                                 helen

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (edited 04-01-2001).]

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5 posted 2001-04-01 02:38 PM


Spiked~
A lament that resounds and sometimes confounds ...
Sadly penned ache ...
~*Marge*~

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spiked
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6 posted 2001-04-02 12:08 PM


Sometimes wounds get re-opened unintentionally. Not as bad as it seems but it did convey the feelings in true form.
Thanks all
Rich

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