Angels in miniskirts... (revised)

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Master
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since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2001-04-01 01:22 AM

Before I get any hate-mail, all of the opinions expressed here are personal and are not intended to persuade or offend anyone else. In the poem, I'm not criticizing religion in general, but the way people tend to look at afterlife as a source of salvation, forgeting their life here.

Angels in miniskirts behind the counters,--
in the stores of New York, the eye encounters
glimpses of after-life, though I still prefer
the comfort of home, present life, and her.

Forty days in the desserts of imagination,--
I wondered how long I’d endure the temptation
of water or as the Devil, himself, proposed,--
the kingdom in which I could find repose.

I swallowed the stones that alas never turned
into bread, as I planned. Thus, slowly, I learned,
that in life, faith, alone, just could not fill
my stomach as well as a home-cooked meal.

I walked over temples, observing the masses,
and weighted the drawbacks versus the assets
of jumping to prove that no angels would come
to save me, but soon understood that it’s dumb.

Religion is more than what Marx suggested,
it’s also a grave in which I festered,--
and after three days, once I rose from my bed,
I learned that I’d rather remain undead.

I learned that it’s better with her, out here,
that I love her much more because she is near,
that even He cannot offer me anything greater;
whatever is there, I will find it later.

Check out my poetry here:

http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 04-01-2001).]

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

1 posted 2001-04-01 01:58 AM

Master,
Hope you are not getting any hate mail, but I understand the expectation.
BTDT, but never tried to write about it, at least not directly, probably should tho'.
Thanks for sharing.

Kraw'

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thecraig
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since 2001-03-11

Posts 223

2 posted 2001-04-01 05:17 AM

I Cannot say I agree with your personnel interpretation, & like every reader I noticed ther strong rhyme on the final verse, I guess your Mummies New York cooking puts a bad story behind the eyes on the first read. Yes sir there's food up there to.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2001-04-01 05:39 AM

This was interesting...really like the title...James

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-04-02 08:07 PM

it doesn't matter whether I agree with it or not Master. . . what matters is that it's excellent writing. . .

well done. . . and I loved the title too!!

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Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

5 posted 2001-04-04 08:02 PM

interesting........very interesting

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