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Best Friends, Lovers, Fools
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Best Friends, Lovers, Fools |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Some of the best times we ever shared Were running barefoot in the sand Kicking and splashing in the waves Sitting to watch the sun sink into the gulf Laughing at the antics of the gulls When we tossed scraps from the picnic We had devoured like two children Then laying back on the blanket To watch the stars diamond dust the sky Then there are the phone calls Where you know just from the sound of my voice What kind of day its been And you know when all I need to hear Is the sound of you breathing On the other end of the line We slip between lovers and friends As easily as the tide kisses the beach Letting us grow slowly one moment at a time Some call us fools because we dare to dream Of something beyond friendship Something more than love The best of all three Best friends Lovers Fools |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
wonderfu!!!!!!!!! Kathleen Blake |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Yes you are right, you wrote this poem very nicely... I do like the poem, except and i don't know if this where is should say it. but i will say slowly, even though... you understand what i am saying. "Queen of the duet's". But also thank you very much i did, i do respect that you would write this. Our friendship means alot. Bernie a  a day for everyone keeps the world 'gBernie Slicker |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Many affective images in this. And I love the use of best friends, lovers, fools. |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Paula This was excellent. I enjoyed the images you gave me. I loved the last lines too... "The best of all three Best friends Lovers Fools" |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Paula.....This is absolutely EXCELLENT! If I could figure out how to make my computer print it out I would. As it is...I'm going to write it out long hand. APPLAUSE!! Bob |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Kathleen...high praise indeed sister of the phoenix...thank you Bernie...I do understand you know that...and your friendship is something I treasure...but if ya dont lay off the "queen of the duets" Im gonna have to....lol well you know...HAHAHA JLR...glad you could see what I could...HUGS...sometimes being foolish is worth it huh? kitkat...Im glad you liked it...those three just seem to go together...thanks Bob...ohh sir you honour me...thank you so very much |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love this one, Paula!!! *S* Wonderful write... and may you be blessed with all three! *S* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Well then being a fool doesn't seem to be so bad if it is one who dares to dream...however I would like some of those dreams to come true...because dreaming doesn't kiss as good...James |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
The simplistic form that you write with ease brings your reader right into the scene and the emotions that are far from simplistic. Outstanding form, subject matter and congitive outcome. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
sometimes we may all be fools--- but it isnt from the dreaming... "Or, like the thief of fire from heaven, |
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dreamer1 12 5 24 Member
since 2000-12-11
Posts 150crossing between |
I loved this poem! It was excellent! I too really like the last four lines. ....peace as a primary objective is dangerous because it implies that we would sacrifice any principle for the sake of it.... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ What a lovely, lovely piece from you~ 'Then laying back on the blanket To watch the stars diamond dust the sky' I've not read a prettier thought ... I'm captivated. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Lovely images here. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Geesh..I haven't commented yet? So sorry..I swear I've read this several times since you posted it. Geesh...I think I need some air or something. ROTFL! So, I've read it several times, and that isn't a lie. I love it. I don't know what else to say. It amazes me every time I read it. We're sorry..this heart has been d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d. Should you like to hold the line we'll be glad to reconnect you.. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
suthern...I am blessed...with new friends growing closer...and old ones who are never far away...thank you James...you are right...dreaming doesnt kiss as good...someday our dream will be reality tho...hugs darlin Julian...thank you for your kind remarks...and all your help Jamie...no not from the dreaming...you are right there my friend..thank you dreamer...thank you so much Marge...you are so sweet to say so dearlady...thank you Lone Wolf...thank you Temptress...LOL...lets see theres a window here somewhere...you silly...Im honoured you would read this more than once thank you |
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