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Honeybee
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0 posted 2001-03-30 08:51 PM



Butterfly Dance Tanka



Glide on gentle breeze
flutter, graceful butterfly
dance in sunshine kisses
paint the land with Springtime dreams
o' exquisite winged artist

~*By Melissa Honeybee*~

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 03-30-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2001-03-30 09:23 PM


Oh, what a beautiful visual you've painted with these words, just lovely Melissa!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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2 posted 2001-03-30 09:27 PM


*sigh* "Winged artist.."
I love it..beautiful

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3 posted 2001-03-30 09:35 PM


"....dance in sunshine kisses...."

now did you do that on purpose?

{~,^}

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2001-03-30 09:57 PM




just perfect Melis ...
your words dance like the butterfly you are  

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

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5 posted 2001-03-30 11:15 PM


VEry beautiful, Melissa!!! Enjoyed the feel and look of this piece.  I didn't count the syllables, the flow was great, the imaging wonderful, surely it must be withing the parameters of a tanka!
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6 posted 2001-03-31 07:33 PM


missy,

wonderful tanka!

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7 posted 2001-03-31 07:53 PM


Melissa~
Lovely, lovely thoughts ...
Delicate lacing ...
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Honeybee
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8 posted 2001-03-31 09:09 PM



Kit, Temptress, Karilea, Janet Marie, Vas, Chels     and Marge:  Thank you! I enjoyed writing this tanka, so glad you stopped by to read it~

hehe Karilea, maybe, maybe not, not telling    

Take care,
Melissa~

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 03-31-2001).]

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9 posted 2002-03-24 05:05 PM




(smiles) Your gorgeous words always flitter with such beauty and grace, sweet friend, I love butterflies so much and this poem made me so excited for all the flowers to bloom soon so I can go outside and find all of the butterflies flittering again! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, you are a true butterfly of friendship to us all, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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