Open Poetry #13 |
The Tide, The Sea, The Moon |
Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
The Tide, The Sea, The Moon Even before we were friends, there was flowing between us- an energy. You the moon, and I the helpless tide, unsure of what moved me. I was pulled across the ocean floor, rising and falling to your rhythms, as you circled above me. Often clouded and hidden still you drew me along. A grateful sea caresses your reflection and carries you upon each wave, as your light touch upon its surface brings about an upwelling from the deep, whose waters have long been seeking your face. Warmed by the embrace, they refuse to sink back down to their cold depths, seeking instead to linger- bringing confusion to all that is above and below. Emotions are dizzied, a whirlpool soon ensues- seeking to restore what was, for fear of what might never be. Wanting only to enjoy once more The tide, the sea, the moon. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". [This message has been edited by Jamie (edited 03-30-2001).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I especially like the first verse. *S* Well done! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jamie I enjoyed your metaphore of tide and moon...my favorite lines were the very human feelings of: "seeking to restore what was, for fear of what might never be. Wanting only to enjoy once more The tide, the sea, the moon." |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautifully done - and beautiful images amidst your lovely words. Sharon aka The Most Excellent Reader of Palms! |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Lovely poem Joyce |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
pulling me along.......ahhha..I love this SEA |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
I thought this was beautiful Jamie, so peaceful and so serene, I enjoyed it very much. Thank you......Sue Suetang |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Loved all of it Jamie, especially the first stanza and these lines...... for fear of what might never be. Wanting only to enjoy once more have you peeped into my heart lately m'friend? looks like it enjoyed muchly as always Maree I may know the word but not say it I may know the truth but not face it I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head indifferent. Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-30-2001).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This triggers special memories for me, adding it to my library Thanks Jamie Hugs Maree I may know the word but not say it I may know the truth but not face it I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head indifferent. Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-30-2001).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks to each and every one of you. It means a lot that you enjoyed it. Thanks. J Jamie |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hey browneyes did I tell you I missed you? This is so wonderful Jamie...just beautiful |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
This was lovely. I like the comparision also. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Did you really?-- ( i like being missed..lol) thanks . kitkat-thank you Jamie |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I don't know what to say dear...I'm overwhelmed? Overcome? Oversomething... You remarkable poet you Thankyou dear heart. hugs always - and remember to see the magic in the sunlight on the floor k? Miss you. Tigger K ...and I have found a lifetime can be lived in one moment... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
(Library) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jamie~ That magnetic pull is beautifully displayed~ Wonderfully written, dear poet. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Applauding here. Excellent, my friend Liz |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
K: Overdone?--lol Marge: Thank you ver much... Liz: Gee, ~blushing~ should I bow?.. thanks Jamie |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Tch..overdone...like steak perhaps??? You know I prefer medium rare heh... K |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Beautiful throughout, Jamie. Lovely visions. Lone Wolf All writing comes |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Jamie, I might not be the first person who says this... but this is fabulous... superlatively so... Regards to you, Sudhir |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Many thanks LW and Sudhir. K- Except when I convince you otherwise..heh "Or, like the thief of fire from heaven, |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
By the third line I was on auto pilot!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Beautiful piece...brilliant writing! Nathan |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Kathleen - Glad it could grab you so much! Nate - Thanks for the wonderful compliment. "Or, like the thief of fire from heaven, |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hang on - when did you ever convince me otherwise? You did no such thing...thank YOU very much...humph (anyway - rem medium rare is practically RAW over there...) K |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Thought I might say: You will. K |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
incredible piece! enjoyed! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
It's nice to read this again..still a very beautiful write m'friend Mxx Have you any dreams you'd like to sell? |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Yes, I enjoyed reading this again too, how beautiful |
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