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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-03-30 11:54 AM

Slithers In
Virginia Salter

hatred comes in
slithering silently
weaving its way
into your thoughts
your actions
your very life
bringing death to any semblance of love
as its venom
drips from its bite
into your sinew, your blood
carrying with it
a yeast that grows
filling all cavities
permeating all flesh
until it subdues
overtaking all that is good
listen diligently for a rattle,
a warning, of its very nature;
pray for discernment
© July 24, 2000

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-03-30 12:18 PM

This is quite opposite from your normal style, Virginia....very dark....intense....

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2001-03-30 12:59 PM

Yes, I agree. Thanks for reading and your comment.

Whenever I walk in tall grasses I listen intently, as my hearing is not as good as I'd like it to be, I try very hard to hear a rattlesnake's warning. It seemed a perfect analogy of the nature of hatred, though I think its warning could be even less detectable where the need of discernment is extremely intense.

Panne447
Member

since 2001-04-03

Posts 196
S.A. TX

3 posted 2001-04-06 05:40 PM

VAS, This is an excellent piece. I enjoyed this so much and yes, hate, acts just like that. Panne

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2001-04-06 06:34 PM

Thanks, Panne! You had to go quite a ways down to find this one I think. Thanks for reading and commenting so nicely!

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

5 posted 2001-04-08 03:23 PM

Very strong writing, analogy, Virginia. I enjoyed this.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Doug Pretorius
Member

since 2001-04-08

Posts 81
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2001-04-08 03:32 PM

Ouch, it's like this poem is covered with thistles. Each line makes no quims about saying exactly what you mean, and it's certainly a very clear warning. Let us never hate.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2001-04-08 11:47 PM

Thanks lots Claire and Doug!

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