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Packratmike
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0 posted 2001-03-30 03:35 AM


darkness
I pass the time
counting the cricket chirps
and heartbeats that prepare for your
footsteps

"HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike

© Copyright 2001 Mike Powers - All Rights Reserved
Cerenity
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1 posted 2001-03-30 05:46 AM


Hi Mike,

This is lovely, enjoyed so much,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



Corinne
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2 posted 2001-03-30 03:36 PM


short and sweet, lovely!

Corinne

kaile
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3 posted 2001-03-31 11:09 AM


you did it right...

and i enjoyed the read

VAS
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4 posted 2001-03-31 11:48 AM


Superbly sensual!  I can feel your anticipation. Very nicely woven!
Packratmike
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5 posted 2001-03-31 12:28 PM


Thank you all....I have revised and added to this on another thread.

Mike

Panne415
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6 posted 2001-04-01 05:53 AM


Mike, Very nicely done - built a sort of suspense even.  I can see and hear you waiting... I thoroughly enjoyed. Panne
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7 posted 2001-04-01 01:58 PM


enjoy
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