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Martie

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California

0 posted 2001-03-29 06:03 PM

(trying to find my muse back in the archieves)

To Capture Becoming

I look into the deep of the lake
a world of glass and refracted light
where grace is perfected in movement
and I color you with moss
and lick the moisture of your reflection.

Is that bejeweled fracture
my cleaving to this day,
for the draining colors my cheeks
in peach and nectarine
and I am bedecked in mossy gown of green
to lovely.

Sway with me oh eyes of grape
pull me down your cool depth
into the sanctity of holding
where bubbles seek air
and pewter fish line the hall
their bellies surging.

I am drowning in words
deepest lines of lure
they touch my surface and change direction
as if time slanted the dimension
until I bleed ebullience.

Breathe in this day now
I am falling and struck by clouds
and the bees are humming around my hair
seeking nectar
I am so full of each becoming minute
that I lie with the sky to cover me
and cannot capture it.

Mabel A. Dilley
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since 2001-03-17

Posts 859
Seattle, WA, USA

1 posted 2001-03-29 06:21 PM

The word usuage is fantastic in this very well written poem. I could see each image.

"I am not now that which I have been."

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2001-03-29 07:50 PM

Martie~
You ARE becoming~

'I am drowning in words
deepest lines of lure
they touch my surface and change direction
as if time slanted the dimension
until I bleed ebullience.'

I enhale your ebullience ! !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

3 posted 2001-03-29 10:32 PM

You are so earthly that you naturally become nature....in this you drown one in essence of water, soil, sand and life....we become you, and infiltrate us....

ah my friend, once again, you know what I would say in acronym, so I won't....but I do.....{~,^}

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

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4 posted 2001-03-29 11:29 PM

Breathtaking my friend.

I agree with Kari on this - like nature yourself.

love ya

K

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2001-03-30 10:27 AM

I remember this one... and welcome the chance to savor it again. *S* You've captured beauty, Martie, and oneness with nature... and a whole bunch of hearts with your wonderful words. *S* Lovely!

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

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USA

6 posted 2001-03-30 10:48 AM

A keeper...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

7 posted 2001-03-31 12:06 PM

I look into the deep of the lake
a world of glass and refracted light
where grace is perfected in movement
and I color you with moss
and lick the moisture of your reflection.

Is that bejeweled fracture
my cleaving to this day,
for the draining colors my cheeks
in peach and nectarine
and I am bedecked in mossy gown of green
to lovely.
=============================
I am drowning in words
deepest lines of lure
they touch my surface and change direction
as if time slanted the dimension
until I bleed ebullience.

Breathe in this day now
I am falling and struck by clouds
and the bees are humming around my hair
seeking nectar
I am so full of each becoming minute
that I lie with the sky to cover me
and cannot capture it.
===========================

and now I am baptised in words... and images divine...
this is breathtaking Martie...
the uniqueness of the imagery is excellent.
very very cool ...
that last verse... poetry in motion.
when ya find your muse...kiss her for this one

It's such a clever innocence with which you show myself to me
As if you know how it feels to never be who you wanted to be
~jackson browne~

Martie

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Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2001-03-31 10:49 AM

Julian--Thank you for letting me know that you could see each image...sometimes I get carried away and lost in them.

Marge--You are so cute!

Karilea--Just the impression I wanted...thank you.

Hi Kamla--so glad to see you!

suthern--Thanks for remembering.

Lady--So are you.

Janet--I think my muse is on an extended vacation...but she didn't take me with her.

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

9 posted 2001-03-31 10:37 PM

You capture it well, Martie!

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

10 posted 2001-03-31 11:32 PM

I bet you were first in art in school right? That

of yours is something like no other, and this is one of my life's pleasures I give thanks for. Such a beautiful painting of words!

JamesBowie
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since 2000-11-25

Posts 252
big old Bangor Maine up by the shack

11 posted 2001-03-31 11:35 PM

Holy Cow! sorry I could not be more creative in my reply. But what a beautiful poem.

Martie

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Posts 28049
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12 posted 2001-04-01 01:00 AM

Hi Denise--I haven't seen you for awhile...I hope you're alright.

Mysteria--Not so good at art...words are what I paint with...thanks.

James--Holy Cow...is a great response...made me smile...I'm glad you found this beautiful.

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