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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
I watched silently Fascinated in a queer sort of way as you rushed in and out of my space on the big bright balloon of your self importance I'm not quite sure you even saw me And so, when you flew out to once again conquer the world I closed the door behind you and locked it Quite sure that with the vast amount of hot air you're filled with you'd bounce off the metal frame with very minimal damage "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Well if anything else, i am paying more attention now....for i have made that same mistake also. Hope he realizes he did. Great write Bernie A  a day keeps the world 'g.Bernie Slicker |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I'm chuckling...hope that's not too inappropriate. No, that wasn't a suggestion for a title. How about 'Cluttered Void'. A lot of words, not much meaning. Honestly enjoyed this! |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Loved this. It said a lot in just a little. How about "Beans and Rice" for a title? *L* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well of course "Hot Air Balloons" comes to mind.... |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Bernie - I suppose we all make that mistake at times. I'm certain I have too. Was just in a rather wicked mood today. JLR - *grins* Your chuckles are not inappropriate. I think you captured my thoughts. LOL "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Thanks PK! *grins* Sunshine, thank you. Yes, that certainly qualifies. "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Just A Woman .... "...big, bright ballon of your self importance..." I am sorry to confess, I've taken a ride on that jet stream once or twice. Very convicting. Well phrased. Bob |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
All Puffed Up and No Where to Go: but out this door. I'm quite sure this does not qualify for a title, but it certainly came to mind as a new country song. Honestly, I think we all have to pass through the door of dating one of self-importance. Amusing bit of poetry here, and much enjoyed. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
"Bob, not you!!!!!!" (mock horror and then a grin!) Thank you. Julian - I do believe you're right. *smiling* I did like your title. "Allow me to introduce my selves" |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
how about "blown away"??? I love the images that you've used here. . . some people are like that. . . so full of themselves. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I have to agree with Sven, blown away seems to be perfect for this poem. It was great....sort of reminds me of my ex husband in many ways.....lol. Well done. *s* Enjoy life...this is NOT a dress rehearsal. *s* |
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