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Auguste
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Cascading Hurts

by Michael Auguste


In crystal hoarfrost evening,
beneath soft starlight's glow,
a man in doleful reverie
tries stir himself from woe.

A mournful spirit holds him close
and will not let him be.
Ten thousand fiery suns look down
from coal-soot canopy.

As trembling shadows move about,
he tries so hard to heal.
Cascading hurts fall one by one.
If but, hearts could not feel.

Now evermore in solitude
he'll cloak his inner light.
In loneliness he'll birth the words
for poems that he will write.

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

© Copyright 2001 Michael Auguste - All Rights Reserved
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Michael, let the light shine....
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This was so beautifully written Michael, I enjoyed reading this very much.  You weave magic with your words.  Regards......Sue

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You write with such a distinct personal touch.  You never fail to tug the emotions.  I so admire your writing.  

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I loved your use of words in this, Michael..."hoarfrost evening", "fiery suns", and "coal-soot canopy"...very original and descriptive.  The ending is sad...I would like to see your light un-cloaked.
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Masterfully written. I do believe you could write and allow your reader any belief possible. Muses do that you know.

"I am not now that which I have been."

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Sad and provocative...

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beautiful, Michael....so touching your words always...   be well


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Wanting to be lost again."
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Sunshine,
I just can't.  Thanks for reading this.


Sue,
Your words are most generous and I do so appreciate your nice comments.  Thank you.


Just A Woman,
That you admire my writing, greatly pleases me.  Thank you, sincerely.
Martie,
It is no longer possible to uncloak my light.  I'm sorry.  I will only do so in my poetry from now on.  Thanks for the nice comments.


Julian,
Thank you for the "masterfully written."  What a wonderful compliment that is.  


Elizabeth Anne,
Thanks for stopping by and reading this.  Welcome to Passions.  I think you'll really like it here.  


Greeneyes,
Thank you for liking this one.  I'm always happy to see your post on one of my poems.  


Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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Such a haunting piece, wrought by heart...
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very sad, I would delete some of the modifiers used in this and make the nouns and verbs do the work, that's my critique, be more specific...

i.e. "emptiness, woe, mourning, shadows"

are too vague......best to you!
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Decaflame,
Thanks for reading and responding to this one.  Yes, haunting would be a good description.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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Irish Rose,

Under ordinary circumstances you would be correct.  However, I purposely chose to be vague in this piece because it deals with a personal matter that I want kept private.  I hope you understand and I appreciate you taking the time to read.  

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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