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Just A Woman
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0 posted 2001-03-29 09:01 AM


Exhaled thoughts
drift quietly throughout the room
Intermixing gracefully
as they could only do
with one presence
Blending and becoming my mood
to soak within
the burgandy walls that surround me
where, night after night,
I paint another layer of
my life, hopes and dreams
in silence




"Often the test of courage is not to die but to live"

~Vittorio Alferi~

[This message has been edited by Just A Woman (edited 03-29-2001).]

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SEA
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with you
1 posted 2001-03-29 09:05 AM


this is so visual....I like this one a lot!    SEA
Just A Woman
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2 posted 2001-03-29 09:06 AM


Thank you, SEA, Good morning!  

"Often the test of courage is not to die but to live"

~Vittorio Alferi~

PoeticKnight
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3 posted 2001-03-29 09:26 AM


simple and elegant.

You might want to edit the 5th to last line though on the word "that"

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state of mind
4 posted 2001-03-29 09:53 AM


Layers and Layers of thoughts, and how to build more layers in ones life...
Library this one goes.
Bernie
A   a day keeps the world  'g.

Bernie Slicker

RMW
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5 posted 2001-03-29 11:31 AM


Just A Woman...."Exhaled thoughts..." ....Exquisite. Bob
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2001-03-29 11:57 AM


Just A Women,
I take your hand to take a bow
For your eligance and know how.
Just A Man

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7 posted 2001-03-29 12:50 PM


is the picture coming together???  it would seem so. . .

wonderful images here. . .  

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8 posted 2001-03-29 12:58 PM


Such a lovely feel to this one JAW, thanks for sharing!
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