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Almost Persuaded
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Almost persuaded By that look in your eyes Almost persuaded By your soft spoken lies Torn by temptation To be held in your arms Almost persuaded To give in to your charms Almost persuaded By your bittersweet kiss Lost in sensation Of this love that I miss Touched by the memory Of the love that we shared Almost persuaded By the heart you laid bare Almost persuaded To try one more time A foolish desire To leave this ache behind This trembling heart cries For the gift of forget Almost persuaded To pretend we just met Almost persuaded Almost...but not quite |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
And such a post it is.. Almost persuaded, not to let go.....but for the moment ...... NOT.... Bernie a  a day keeps the world 'G.Bernie Slicker |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Hang in there! This was very good. I enjoyed it. Joyce |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
So many times I have almost been persuaded...but I call it temptation...James |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ This is such a tender render ... 'This trembling heart cries For the gift of forget' Oh ... very well said, poet. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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JamesBowie Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 252big old Bangor Maine up by the shack |
get far far away. pleasing write-slam the door before> |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Step back, look him straight in the eye, then turn and run as fast as you can. Never let him get in control again. Almost is only in horseshoes and hand gernades. You did good. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Paula~ YOU ROCK!! This my dear, is AWESOME!!! Felt it 100% SEA |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh yeah! I like that it says it all! What a great write Paula! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
GOOD for YOU!!! i wasn't so lucky....(or I was luckier....) lol.......doesn't take much to persuade ME... *grin* good job on this one, paula...... some really good lines in here.... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Forgot to add this one to my library! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Bernie...I know just what you are saying...thanks sweet friend Joyce...Im glad you enjoyed it...thank you James...temptation...persuasion...can be one and the same I suppose depending on who's doing the tempting...hugs to you Marge...youalways flatter me so...thank you sweet lady James Bowie...lol far away huh? Glad you liked this...thanks inot2B...great advice...thank you Sea...and you are just too kind...awesome indeed...but Im so glad you could feel this ethome...coming from you sweet poet...thank you so much doreen...thanks I appreciate your comments LOL ethome...thank you so much for the honour |
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forevernbluejeans Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 76 |
Almost but not quite...how that hurts |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Great write Paula! |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Don't know how I missed this the first time around. Glad I didn't this time. I not only enjoy what you write, I learn from it. Thanks for this one! Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Wow!! So very well written. I call these times the silver bullet trick when barely missed is as good as a mile. Good for you! Don't look back. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
Paula, Almost didn't come in - so glad I did - hold fast at times like these. Nicely done. Panne |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
I'm with SEA...you do rock, Paula! This is an incredible write! You go!! sp  to be with you... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I can add nothing more than my agreement to the ones before me. You ROCK. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Good one Paula, You do Rock Ya know :-) |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
It isn't always easy to resist that temptation at times. You have done a great job of portraying those feelings we sometimes feel. Well done! All writing comes |
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Beckalini Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 151Yorkshire, England |
Brilliant! Sorry to echo, but you do rock! I think we've all come close to being persuaded... you fancy giving lessons on how to resist? Enjoyed this muchly! ~Becky~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
forevernbluejeans...yes it certainly does..thanks insect...thank you...its good seeing you again JLR...you have such a way with a compliment my sweet friend...thank you so much Julian...LOL never look back...you may not want to see whats gaining on you...thanks Panne447...well I glad you dropped in and Im equally glad you enjoyed this sp...you are just so sweet to say so...thank you Interloper...you honour me sir kitkat...I'm just glad you all think so Lone Wolf...Yes well you know what they say...hindsight is always 20/20...thanks Beckalini...lol girl...me? give lessons? I think I succumb more often than I resist...its just so easy to fall back on the easy way |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
This poem is insanely good. It flowed with a wonderful rythum and still held very heartfelt thoughts. Sounds as though my ex girlfriend could have wrote this too. lol j/k. great poem. *JOE* |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is a wonderful poem.Joyce |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
now that last line was great. i was ready for a downward turn, for some lines of heartache at the end and you go and lead me on like that... wonderful twist! O. Henry would be proud  hehehe"Many great relationships start or end in a bar. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh Paula, who can we get to sing this. It is fantastic. I know just the feeling, of course. Damn, you put this well. And it truly should be set to music. Sandra |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Joe...you are sweet to say so (cept about the ex  )Joyce...thank you very much... Ethan...but sweetie...you know how much I like twisted endings...and I always love your replies...hugs Sandra...ethome does wondeful things with music...maybe we could get him to... |
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