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Marina
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0 posted 2001-03-28 09:15 PM



Trivial Thoughts

Who knows
Why love once chose
The one who now mocks bliss
With vile that turned a warm heart
From you

Marina March 28/2001



It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley




[This message has been edited by Marina (edited 03-29-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Marina Crossley - All Rights Reserved
Jamie
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1 posted 2001-03-28 09:57 PM


the title is so misleading--- this is very thoughtful and well done--- makes a wonderful statement

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


Nate Dogg
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2 posted 2001-03-29 02:44 AM


A very relative write...it's nice....I like it.  

Nathan

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3 posted 2001-03-29 09:31 AM


Marina~ I like this style, seems there is a lot that can be said  with very few words.....well done!   SEA
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4 posted 2001-03-29 12:56 PM


these thoughts are definitely not trivial. . .

excellent. . .

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5 posted 2001-03-29 01:00 PM


Terribly sad, terribly!

Oh, did you mean chose or chooses?  choose doesn't fit the tense.

Marina
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6 posted 2001-03-29 05:07 PM


Jamie, thank you.  I personally like the title the best at of the whole poem.  

Nate, thanks very much.  

Sea, thank you.  It is truly amazing the message you can put acroos isn't it.  

Sven, thank you.  

Vas, thanks for the correction and for stopping by.  

Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



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7 posted 2001-03-31 11:21 AM


not trivial..in fact, this is thought-provoking...made me pause for a while
Irish Rose
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8 posted 2001-04-04 07:46 PM


made me think and I love a Cinquain
wayoutwalt
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9 posted 2001-04-05 03:34 PM


yipe...bit me awake
Sunshine
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10 posted 2001-04-05 03:37 PM


Nothing trivial about this at all...
Marina
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11 posted 2001-04-05 03:58 PM


Faterider, thank you very much.  You seem to be quite a Cinquian lover!  

Kathleen, they are definitely fun to write!  

Wayoutwalt, awake now are we?  Thanks for dropping by.  

Sunshine, thanks so much.  

Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



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