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Slow Burn |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Slow Burn~ I can see you now-- much clearer than I did before. Still nothing I felt has changed ... except that I want you even more. I'm not talking about true love, no cliche' promises of destiny. I'm talking about wanting to feel your heat, to smolder in the slow burn of your intensity. I can try to dress it up in subtlety, try to disguise it in metered rhyme. But it simply all comes down to this, I just want your mouth on mine. One week, one night, one hour, one chance to touch your flame. One time to witness deliverance, in moments that know no shame. I'm not asking for forever ... Just awhile to put your tired mind at ease. Allow me to quiet all your chaos, and then bring you to your knees. Lets just get this out of our system, surrender to the draw of this desire. Give in to this temptation without hesitation ... turn to smoke and ash in the heat we inspire. And I swear I'd burn in hell ... for just your touch alone. For what I trust in you, is all I've never known. Some thing's you just don't get over, to some things we become a slave. Consider this my poetic confession ... I'll take this ache of you to my grave. Janet Marie ~*~~*~~*~~*~ ~Face To Face~ by:Tom Kimmel cd: Circle Back Home I want you to know me ... I want you to know me ... I wanna get next to you see whats under that icy blue I want you to show me want you to show me I wanna get next to you see whats under that icy blue Hear you whisper that you want me too stretch the night the way lovers do I want you to know me know me ... Now were standing on the line ... I mean face to face I'll be turning on like a dime if you move my way I wanna do it just right with you wanna feel the fever like lovers do wake up in the middle of the night with you Face to face I want you to know me .. want you to know me I wanna get next to you See what under there touches you I want you to show me want you to show me I wanna get next to you wanna turn the pages of a rare issue Feel the fever like lovers do Feel the rhythm inside of you chase the night until the day is thru Hear you whisper you need me too Now were standing on the line ... I mean face to face I'll be turning on like a dime if you move my way I wanna do it just right with you wanna feel the fever like lovers do wake up in the middle of the night with you Face to face Face to face oh you speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes my body aches to breathe your breath your words keep me alive ~Sarah McLachlan~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-28-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I hate to admit this to the world but there have been a few touches worth burning for! Kathleen Blake |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
First, I must preen a bit that I'm finally getting to reply within 3 days of you posting the poem... the queen of suckey timing is getting it right for once! LOL "And I swear I'd burn in hell ... for just your touch alone. For what I trust in you, is all I've never known. Some thing's you just don't get over, to some things we become a slave. Consider this my poetic confession ... I'll take this ache of you to my grave." Yanno what, hon? When it's this consuming, we're only lying to ourselves that we'd be happy with just once... unless that once is a long lifetime. *S* For one week, one night, one hour doesn't douse the flame... it fuels it... and the need only leaves our system when we're 6 feet under (if then! *S*) But I won't tell if you won't! LOL You've penned smouldering perfection here, JM... It sizzles... it burns slow and burns hot! (I'm quite sure my monitor is smoking! LOL) [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 03-28-2001).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--Yup, I think Ruth is right...and hon, you write your burn into my heart...and I ache too, that is some awesome power you have with words. |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Oh Janet, my dear poetess....I bow to your skill......I smile and revel in the glory you write.......damn girlie.....you are awesome!!  SEA |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I concur with SEA, janet. This was very, very good. Powerful stuff here. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dear JM, Your dragon has set Randy on fire. And he's burning up with desire. He didn't even put a sadle on. He just leaped up and was gone. He knows you didn't mention his name But he forgives you just the same. He will be there in just a few hours With a bouquet of gorgious flowers. If you can let him down easy And keep him away from the nearest speakeasy. Wonderful poem. Winkiewinkie |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It's gonna take more than a vial of water to put this fire out! Hmmm....ever go skinny dipping in the Mississippi?  I think it's time! Know anybody we can get as a lifeguard?  This one IS the intensity of YOU, m'twin! Sizzling write--one I understand well--AS YOU KNOW! Love ya much...now I'd better go read before I spontaneously combust!  |
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Panne415 Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 104San Antonio |
Janet, I had such fun reading this. You really put it out there and truth to tell - we have all felt that way about someone at least once in our lives. Thanks. Panne |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Jan, I think this is one of your best. It is true from the heart and believe me I know EXACTLY what you our talking about here. You said it perfectly. Your muse has served you well today.  Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I can try to dress it up in subtlety, try to disguise it in metered rhyme. But it simply all comes down to this, I just want your mouth on mine. One week, one night, one hour, one chance to touch your flame. One time to witness deliverance, in moments that know no shame. I'm not asking for forever ... Just awhile to put your tired mind at ease. Allow me to quiet all your chaos, and then bring you to your knees.' Um...WHOA...ahem...I do believe I like this side of your pen, JM!! Tssssssst...  ...excellent writing, as always, m'friend!! sp  to be with you... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
JM~ oh wow my friend, what a desire of want....I love this side of you too....  be well...Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Janet Marie, I thought my fever was from my illness....little did I know that you were sitting here like a little spider, causing incendiaries to arise within souls, and those souls reaching out, saying "read this....and then, and only then, will you know the cause for the burn...." and now I have to take a deep breath, and a cold shower.... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Shazzzzzzzzzzam baby...this one is a slow burn into the soul....yes no matter how you write it there is that blue dancing flame that we fly right into...whether we "NEED" it or not right toots...lol oh yes...we NEEEEEEEED it....because without it we would be out of a job ...I'm not asking for forever ... Just awhile to put your tired mind at ease. Allow me to quiet all your chaos, and then bring you to your knees. Lets just get this out of our system, surrender to the draw of this desire. Give in to this temptation without hesitation ... turn to smoke and ash in the heat we inspire. ohhhhhhhhhh baby...I wanna write like this when I grow up!!!! You are poetic perfection with golden strands of weave running through your veins...Love ya sweets! H~ |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Janet, it will take a lot of something to cool down this hot flash!! Brother, I don't think there was anything or any one around in my age range to make a burn like this. And they called them the good old days. Very well done and ( eating ice cubes) enjoyed. Hugs, ME |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Give in to this temptation without hesitation ... turn to smoke and ash in the heat we inspire." "For what I trust in you, is all I've never known." WOHHH JM ... Is your pen smokin'??? You're burnin' up these pretty blue pages with the intensity that smolders behind these words girl!  Incredible write Janet Marie, powerful, intense, and fraught with emotion! Now, I'll quietly slip away and pretend I've never felt this ever before, no never, shhhhh! Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 03-28-2001).] |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
what can I say, this is a very seductive and sizzling poem to say the least, I agree with everyone, we've all been there that one touch, but one touch turns to much, so beware |
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tradewind Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 101 |
Bravo! passionate, sensual and done with taste! very nice writing, Janet! |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great poem, Janet...your poemas always free-flowing and intresting....much love....peace! Nathan |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This was so sizzling and very  and this poetry suits you well! LOL...encore! |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
JanGator ... Amzing how you always seem to find just the right words to describe a feeling i am dealing with. How do you do it? This is amazing work Jan, truly astonishing |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A brilliant burn indeed! Janet, my friend, I really enjoyed reading this one... Regards, Sudhir. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
See? *G* I told you once was not enough! LOL. And yanno what? It's every bit as superb after simmering through the night. *S* |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Just in the time it took to change screens...these words have gotten me so distracted. Incredible...I have a rather small library, this is now a big part of it. Thanks! Some are indeed worth burning for. |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
Janet, OMG woman! the screen is in flames! LOL Great write....i loved it! keep it up. Take Care, *Laura* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
my apologies for taking so long to thank you all for the wonderful, funny and endearing replies.. I had both server probs and restrictions on my time yesterday ... I'll be back later today and thank all indivdually time allowing... as I left handed peck-type really slow love to poetry land jm oh you speak to me in riddles |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
ok, I give, what was the address. Oh, not about me....damn...damn... ok, whats the address anyway. Janet, when your smoken your smoken. The arch in 30 minutes, race you there. Parker |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
What bookshelf is this going to be? You created a dreamy situation.LP Day in Day out...My love for you grows. |
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PoemCrazy Member
since 2000-11-30
Posts 159 |
wow. anybody know a good treatment for burns? ouch!...tom |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ BRANDING IRON BEAUTY ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Janet, We've all had the need for that "slow burn", that touch with no attachments. BRAVO, BRAVOOOOO!!! Once again, you've done a wonderful job here! ~Sheri |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Janet, this sizzles in sensuality, you are aflame girl. Keth. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Janet-- well well well...i am glad i finally got my behind over here to check out some work...and look at what caught my eye this is sensational as always...full of your mastered craft. as always so wonderful to read you. this is HOTTTTTT! love you. me |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
Pull the curtain...*sigh* forget the cold water. This is a keeper for me. let our hands communicate what's in our heart. A Wisp of a brush... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
P-man, Latin Passions, Poem Crazy ,Marge Irie Kethry Amy, THANK YOU so very much and I am again sorry I took so long to reply to this... I thought I had....I think me or my server has flipped out...me, Im sure.... LOL thanks for these wonderful replies!!!! |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
Your poem, I've read several times, each time I'm drawn to it. let our hands communicate what's in our heart. A Wisp of a brush... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
JM, I'm wrapping up my reading2nite and came across this gem which by the way I can't believe I missed on first round but anyways, I gotta tell ya sweetie this poem is spectacular... Muaah on cheekz2uMydearPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Coco....our sweet poetess and devoted reader of the back pages.... thank you so much for your faithful following and wonderful compliments.... I read your reply to Mark on the phone tonite to his poem as well and he asks me to thank you on his behalf... you spoil us with your kind words...and we love ya for it MUUUUAAAW to you too  You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
Another Wow poem for the library, although I'm afraid it might burn a hole through the shelf! Isn't it wonderful and crazy how we can desire to touch the flame even knowing the scars it will leave? I have much more respect for the fire these days...your poem does justice to its power. [fontcolor=red]Go ahead, push your luck; find out how much love the world can hold[/font] |
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