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JamesBowie
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0 posted 2001-03-27 11:40 PM


I can feel the marbles
slipping through my fingers
little glass reminders
of what I am losing
The problem is
this is not a game
and only now do I realize
I never knew how to play

A real man

kisses his children goodnight

© Copyright 2001 James Bowie - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-27 11:52 PM


JamesB~
It is SO good to see you back 'home'.

I pray you are well and that your muse will gift us with more of these wonderful pieces.
*Hugs*

Lost a marble or two of my own, my friend.
~*Marge*~

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2 posted 2001-03-28 09:33 PM


Hello, James. This is a clever handling of a metaphorical theme, to be sure. Brief, strong, well-lined. A striking last line. Thanks for it.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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3 posted 2001-03-28 11:12 PM


I like this it is short and consise and to the point, and the use of the game of marbles is one that is easily related too. It is a good use of metaphore. Enjoyed it very much.
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4 posted 2001-03-28 11:17 PM


James~ this is such a great poem....these lines hit home for me


                    "and only now do I realize
                    I never knew how to play"

excellent writing    SEA

JamesBowie
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5 posted 2001-03-29 07:05 AM


thanks guys, I keep it short cuz big words confuse me
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6 posted 2001-03-29 09:19 PM


Confusion reigns, James...
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