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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 2001-03-27 09:49 AM


Far from the physical
Space where our shells perform
Puppets on mental strings
These most glorious things
Find a way to keep the bodies warm

Ever the constant illusion
Of reality out of reach
Cold comfort though
Cold winds blow
Our minds yet, never breached

Suffer these, the hallowed
Times in which we dwell
Far beyond physical
More than mystical
Than these earthen, dusty shells

No magic words be spoken
Nor given an outward sign
We become
As one
When our minds become entwined


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1 posted 2001-03-27 09:55 AM


"We become
As one
When our minds become entwined"
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That, my dear, is just too cool of an idea....I really like this...sets my mind spinning SEA

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2 posted 2001-03-27 10:10 AM


"As one
When our minds become entwined"

Great one PK, shows a side of love we all forget sometime. Enjoyed it!

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3 posted 2001-03-27 10:21 AM


Far from the physical
Space where our shells perform
Puppets on mental strings
These most glorious things
Find a way to keep the bodies warm

Ever the constant illusion
Of reality out of reach

Our minds yet, never breached

Suffer these, the hallowed
Times in which we dwell
Far beyond physical
More than mystical
Than these earthen, dusty shells
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We become
As one
When our minds become entwined
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entwining with your poetic mind tis a most inspiring way to start ones day *S*
this one is engraved in my mind...
as I have always admired the imagery and conception of thoughts within the 1st and 3rd verse ...
those are some very cool and unique, clever lines PK.
and of course the emotions and cadence are easy on the mind as well
another gem and fave.

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

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4 posted 2001-03-27 10:30 AM


A most insightful write....well done Sir!
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5 posted 2001-03-27 04:33 PM


you've stirred up something with this one........as soon as I have a chance to settle my mind tonight....it will come together    SEA    ( I know, settling my mind is a scary thought LOL)
PoeticKnight
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6 posted 2001-03-27 04:58 PM


Me? Stirred something up? I hope its a tasty drink. *L* And please don't settle your mind SEA, keep it shaken, not stirred.
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7 posted 2001-03-27 06:19 PM


... you have a talent with words and phrasing and this piece proves it....

thank you for posting

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8 posted 2001-03-27 06:29 PM


Yes!!!

This is excellent. . . showing that the intertwining of minds is as important as the intertwining of bodies. . .

Perfect PK. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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9 posted 2001-03-27 08:17 PM


ok, so there isn't enough time in my day to settle my mind.....so now, it's shaken.....
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10 posted 2001-03-28 11:41 AM


I like this one very much... Entwined minds isn't just a sensual thought... it's a necessity for long term smiles! *S*
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11 posted 2001-03-28 12:07 PM


very well done...

Jamie

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"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


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