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Paula Finn
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0 posted 2001-03-27 12:30 PM


Time in a bottle
Adrift on an endless sea
Sands of time denied


© Copyright 2001 Paula Finn - All Rights Reserved
Mabel A. Dilley
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1 posted 2001-03-27 12:46 PM


I do so enjoy Japanese short form. Thank you.

"I am not now that which I have been."

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2001-03-27 12:46 PM


Paula~
Such perfection of thought
in this tiny work of art.

Applause - Applause !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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3 posted 2001-03-27 01:32 AM


A cliche', twisted fresh like lemonade.
Nice goin', Paula.

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2001-03-27 09:59 AM


Very nice Paula...James
Irish Rose
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5 posted 2001-03-27 10:42 AM


Reminded me of Jim Choche "Time in a bottle"
enjoyed this format very much.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


JLR
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6 posted 2001-03-27 09:49 PM


This has given me a great idea!  Thank you friend.  Oh and by the way...Loved It!  Where did I put that cork?
Paula Finn
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7 posted 2001-03-27 11:28 PM


Julian...no thank you...I find this form so challenging...but lots of fun

Marge...LOL well you are the one who encouraged me when I was just starting to learn this...hugs right back at ya

Krawdad...Fresh squeezed lemonade
       Tart and tangy on your lips
          Natural pucker
Thanks

Kathleen...so glad you enjoyed it my fellow Phoenix

James...hugs to you my sweetest friend

JLR...OH NO!!!! An idea...look out world...hehehe  let me know how it turns out ok? HUGS

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8 posted 2001-03-28 09:18 AM


Paula~ this is wonderful...amazing how a small poem can bring to mind such grand visions    SEA
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9 posted 2001-03-28 09:47 AM


it's nice the way you made many thoughts came by saying just few words

thanx

WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL)
EASY ON ME.. I'M JUST AN AMATEUR

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10 posted 2001-03-28 09:49 AM



It's amazing how only 3 lines can touch a person and make them say wow!~

Take care,
Melissa~

ethome
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11 posted 2001-04-12 07:12 PM


For a minute I thought I'd come across Jim Croce's sister! But then I said that's my dear friend Paula and she's written a wonderful piece here. So much yearning and desire for the warmth of forever in this one. Written proof that we writers will dream and drift off into forever even after we pass on....on into the never ending stream of consciousness...the all knowing consciousness of infinite discovery!  The consciousness that all the evolutionists can't explain! Where did that power of reasoning come from, the ability to plan and invent and conquer. The creative ability that lasts even though we can't comprehend anything without a beginning or an end.....       Love to ya dear poet friend!
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12 posted 2001-04-12 08:01 PM


cool o yuh
Sunshine
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13 posted 2001-04-12 08:05 PM


Paula....isn't it fun when you leave behind smiles....?
Paula Finn
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14 posted 2001-04-14 04:15 AM


SEA...well sometimes I just cant find more than a few words...thanks sweet lady

DreamLess...I like this form of writing...its a challenge...thank you

Melissa...you flatter me...thank you

ethome...your reply is poetry itself dear friend...and gives me many thoughts to ponder...I dont know whether to thank you...or smack you...so I guess I will just hug you instead...HUGS

Walt...way cool...thanks

Sunshine...I sure like to try

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