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You with All the Power
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You with All the Power |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
You with All the Power I have no strength of character The powers that be knew my weakness when they dealt me such an easy hand So why now have they decided to change the rules midgame Why now do they expect that I can change I have no desire to learn to grow to become a person of character when the lack has served me well Don’t act surprised when I rage against your self-righteousness your pop psychology mentality You wanted me dependent under your control now you pull the rug from beneath me and wonder why I can’t stand You with all the power I am your creation |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Wow.......this hits rather close to home here, JLR. Might I say this is one of your best writes? I'm going to reflect some on this one. I'm really glad you posted it. "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
We really should never be under any one else's complete control; been there, done that---no more. Kathleen Blake |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
indeed. . . we should never be under anyone's control. . . nor should we give up that control because it's what we think they want us to do. . . this is excellent. . . powerful words. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
JLR, this is a powerful poem worth thinking more about. Enjoyed. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Throw it out there. Enjoyed this read! |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Just a Woman---Thank You...unfortunately brutal, personal honesty is sometimes where I find the best words. Irish Rose---You are right, of course. Thanks for the words of strength. Sven---No excuses, just thank you for your support. Dee---Thank you so much for reading and responding. Sunshine---It is indeed thrown out there and I for one am exhausted. As always, thank you. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Girl...its there...power of your own...it may take you a while to come to it...but trust me I know...LOVE YA |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
The bitter legacy of a cruel creation . . . I know something about that but haven't been able to air it out yet. Courage to you, JLR. Hard to stand when the legs have been broken . . . |
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tradewind Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 101 |
strong words...and very true you've written this well |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
I'd like to print this "gem" out and send it directly to my parents. I'm going to be reading this one again and again. Thank you for your brutal honesty, I've found this is the only way to live..  KateBlessings Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
R.J. This one hit a little to close to home. but i love it. Great write girlie! keep it up. ttys, *Laura* |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
A poem torn from deep within which most do not understand all the painful acheing steps one hauls their interior from each bloody its own Yes you were made Yes the pain is unceasing But seeing the darkness brought to light you can begin to make yourself in the image you select design yourself the artists greatest challenge Here is the canvas of my life of me I have the brushes I have paint Have the will to paint Love yourself enough to paint despite what bygone critcs say Here is my canvas my colors are rainbows I shall paint the me that I Choose to be Not what someone thought I should or should not be here I am all the colors here I am me I know I was taught certain colors attitudes perspective washes throw them away paint form heart and mind combined paint only for yourself for only you inhabit your day we are ALL made everyone of us time nips and drags us though once we learn we are not who they made us or thought we were if I may not in great surprise quote a song of my own here "Throw it back in their face, let them devour their own disgarce, do what you do, you need not ask why, if its right you'll keep doing it until the day you die, Do what you do" I see untold uneccesarry suffering near everywhere I turn this land of abundance is dying for it no longer has a heart we the living no matter station or beliefs it is Our responsibility to give back that heart of living You are not alone I stopped writing fiction in prose for near 20 years while adding plot after plot character after each One day I realized it was my parental's both intrusion of privacy and more their amusement that at 16 I was sending out stories to magazines I think it was the laughter that drove the stake into my heart but now I have incorporated all these years into something I am just slightly proud of and I no longer consider those people as determiners of me Why to say this all in public well I think the time for sweeping things under bulging rugs has passed and we all hurt and we were all made and everyone of us needs to place the canvas the brushes the paint and begin oh and yes you can from this or any moment on never doubt that its time to paint our lives more importantly so many self portraits are in need of being done right now how many have the least idea who you really are time time for being time for painting time to be not what you were made to think was you NO time to paint the reality of me try it you may be surprised just what the canvas reveals either way it is your eyes that judge now and forever "The most redeeming facet of life is that we have the comfort of knowing it will end. Death doth love equally." [This message has been edited by ATelamon (edited 03-28-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
While I can understand the anger this brings, I was under someone's complete control once upon a time, and it almost killed me ( he almost killed me ).....getting away was the best thing that ever happened in my life!! I hope you find peace if this is about you..... SEA |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Go for it, my friend...much depth here...love it. jwesley |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
He pull the rug, but you set yourself free and I'm sure he felt the dust! I like this one! A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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