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Martie
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0 posted 2001-03-25 06:13 PM


Come with Me

Come with me down this street
darling, you are my darling,
and we will notice the trees
heavy with oranges
and the flowering ones will exhale,
their heavy breath
will turn the grass pink.

Come and see
how the blue bird travels
across the ground
his eyes darting
with hunger,

and how the sun slants now
into the afternoon,
for spring is moving
and its blooming cracks
the hard caked soil
and spits out promises.

Turn to me
and see how I move,
as if spirit held me mirthful
and each step is measured
with the fragrance of cut grass.

I will not walk like this tomorrow
or see this burgeoning day,
nor will you look at me with that quick concern
that I know so well
that comes from years of reading gestures.

The language of love
dangles between us
so rare and perfect,
come with me now
darling, you are my darling,
for I will hold your hand
and listen to you weave your words
and we will be quiet
in the sunset,
that is a promise.




In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 03-25-2001).]

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2001-03-25 06:18 PM


Martie~
This is just perfectly perfect ! !

'Turn to me
and see how I move,
as if spirit held me mirthful
and each steps is measured
with the fragrance of cut grass.'


Oh, I like ....
but, my favorite thought is -

'darling, you are my darling'
TWICE no less ! ! Love it !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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2 posted 2001-03-25 07:12 PM


ah yes. . . nothing like quiet sunsets. . .

wonderful Martie. . .

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3 posted 2001-03-25 07:16 PM


you little tease, dangling promises like that.....

a treasure!

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4 posted 2001-03-25 09:55 PM


wonderful poetry Martie... a true pleasure to read...
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5 posted 2001-03-26 01:47 AM


"you look at me with that quick concern
that I know so well
that comes from years of reading gestures.

The language of love
dangles between us
so rare and perfect,
come with me now
darling, you are my darling,
for I will hold your hand
and listen to you weave your words
and we will be quiet
in the sunset,
that is a promise."

as I go to sleep - (late here)
I'll fantasize on these beautiful words



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6 posted 2001-03-26 04:07 AM


Martie, you sure know how to melt words to form the most wonderful expresion in subtle and beautiful images...

Lovely... of love ...

Regards,
Sudhir

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7 posted 2001-03-26 04:10 AM


"Their heavenly breath shall turn the grass pink"...this is happening right out my front window~*~My what wonderful images your muse sees and paints, just lovely.
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8 posted 2001-03-26 08:47 AM


Beautiful piece of poetry here. *sighs* just lovely
Martie
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9 posted 2001-03-26 01:40 PM


Darling sis...you would like that line..

Sven--Yes

Karilea--I always keep my promises...promise.

Mike--If this pleasures you...I'm glad

Bill--I'm glad you found the beautiful.

Sudhir--I'm so glad to see you again.

Sharon--Thank you so much for the lovely.

kitkat--Thank you so much for such a sweet reply.

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10 posted 2001-03-26 04:37 PM


Martie,

This is nice and full of imagery.

Michael

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"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

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11 posted 2001-03-26 06:36 PM


Your specific imagery is again, wonderful, Martie, and I mean that. You obviously work to perfect every post. This one is no exception!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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