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Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

0 posted 2001-03-25 12:08 PM

If I should wake to find my loved one gone,
No longer lying gently by my side.
How could I find the will to carry on?
Were it not better that I should have died?
If I should find him only in my dreams
And days bring loneliness and misery;
Then I would long for night and soft moonbeams
And sweet dreams would my only solace be.

A life without my love, no life at all,
But mere existence, thinking of the day,
He left me only dreams and sweet recall
Of how it was before he went away.
Then I awake and reach for him at dawn
And count the many years since he's been gone.

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

1 posted 2001-03-25 01:17 PM

Such beautiful words.
"Then I would long for night and soft moonbeams
And sweet dreams would my only solace be.
I'm glad that you have those memories to keep you going.

Every minute you are angry, you lose 60 seconds of happiness.
- Ralph Waldo Emerson

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-03-25 01:46 PM

If I should find him only in my dreams
And days bring loneliness and misery;
Then I would long for night and soft moonbeams
And sweet dreams would my only solace be.

A life without my love, no life at all,
But mere existence, thinking of the day,
He left me only dreams and sweet recall
Of how it was before he went away.
Then I awake and reach for him at dawn
And count the many years since he's been gone.
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Joyce this is a very lovely bittersweet piece
wonderful cadence and rhyme...
so very well written with shades of Shakespeare and perhaps a touch of Poe's melancholy...
great use of poetic phrasing and imagery as well.
well done poetess
take care
jm

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-03-25 03:19 PM

tender and heartfelt Joyce. . .

wonderful. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

4 posted 2001-03-25 06:27 PM

Beautiful melancholy piece.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2001-03-25 07:30 PM

I know many who fit this piece....well done Joyce....

Dee
Member Elite

since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

6 posted 2001-03-25 07:34 PM

Beautiful, Joyce, just beautiful.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

7 posted 2001-03-25 07:35 PM

~Oh Joyce,...I just read another that hit me like this. My chest is achy and I can't count how many reads. I am in awe. *Peace for your heart.

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