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Kethry
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0 posted 2001-03-24 04:41 PM


I am re-posting this from twelve because I couldn't get the format right, and this gives me a second chance.


         

All honesty to quick, wit  could be caustic
R
apid of temper, will be a team member
I
n all things demure, a heart that is pure
E
ternal in aspire and meets their desire
S
elf moving in creed in word and in deed

T
he impulse to try but questions asks why
H
eld by sign of fire, but not in funeral pyre
E
xceptional yes!  Can work  under duress

R
esults aiming so high doesn't trust the I
A
ll wise as Athena could live at a marina
M
ore dynamic in charm cannot do  harm


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.






[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 03-26-2001).]

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Kethry
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1 posted 2001-03-24 04:48 PM


It still won't do what I want so I'm giving up.
Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-03-24 05:32 PM


well ya can give up on the format...
but not the way cool poem...
you have decribed the Aries nature well...
I have a sis and brother who are Aries ...
and there are over 12 family birthdays in April...
a whole lotta Rams around here
well done groovy girl.

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

Honeybee
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3 posted 2001-03-25 12:49 PM



~Wow! Clever poetic ode to Aries~

Take care,
Melissa~

Krawdad
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4 posted 2001-03-25 01:35 AM


Aries . . . YES !!!

You must be an early spring/fall babe, no?

Paula Finn
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5 posted 2001-03-25 01:47 AM


Do ME!!! DO ME !!!!!!!!! can you guess what I am?
Kethry
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6 posted 2001-03-25 04:10 AM


Krawdad, this is not my sign I just do them for the fun of it. As for a fall baby... I am... I fell off the back of a coal truck. My mother fainted in the street a coal truck was coming by and as my mother had gone into labour they kindly gave my mother a lift to the hospital.

Paula, I think you are a Gemini. Only one more sign until I reach yours. Hopefully by that time I'll get this font thing under control.

Be real and feel
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Kit McCallum
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7 posted 2001-03-25 08:49 AM


You've captured this sign well Kethry ... I know of few who match this perfectly, very nicely done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Kethry
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8 posted 2001-03-25 04:45 PM


Thanks Kit,
just a little series that wont let go.
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Nan
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9 posted 2001-03-26 07:26 AM


This is great, Keth... I'd be a Gemini as well.. and I'll be watching...
Janet Marie
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10 posted 2001-03-26 07:37 AM


I see ya got it too work....very cool Keth
an acrostic with same line rhyme ...
yeppers..way cool

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

Sudhir Iyer
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11 posted 2001-03-26 08:25 AM


O Kethry,

Yes I am... Aries, that's right...

great that you did a re-post, else I would have missed a gem...

Regards,
Sudhir

Kethry
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Victoria Australia
12 posted 2001-03-26 04:45 PM


Nan, thanks so much for the repair job, you're a marvel, and a marvellous person.

Janet, it wasn't me but thanks for stopping by again.

Sudhir, I guessed you would be an Aries, some of my favourite people have been born under that sign.
Be real and feel
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Krawdad
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13 posted 2001-03-27 12:37 PM


Had to come back to see if you got it fixed. Nice visual touch. Love the internal rhyme too.
Dopey Dope
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14 posted 2001-03-27 05:06 PM


I like how it looks here. Very well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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