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Lone Wolf
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0 posted 2001-03-23 10:28 PM



He makes me laugh
When I am down
He makes me smile
When I frown

He makes me relax
When I am tense
He makes me look
Beyond the fence

He makes me see
The beauty within
He makes respond
With the biggest grin

He makes me walk
Through the trees
He makes me sail
With a breeze

He makes me happy
Being by his side
He makes me feel
No need to hide

He gives me hope
When days are dark
He makes me realize
I hit the mark

He shows to me
Love without strings
He writes the tune
To which my heart sings

He gives me freedom
To pursue my dream
Together he and I
Make the perfect team


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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kaile
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1 posted 2001-03-23 10:30 PM


such a delightful read...and this put a smile on my face..think this can turn into a lovely rap song...was rapping in my mind when i was reading this in fact...
Tennessee Angel
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2 posted 2001-03-23 10:32 PM


He makes me look
beyond the fence
----------------
I really enjoyed this read. The thought that there may be someone out there like this gives my heart reason to keep looking.

Irish Rose
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3 posted 2001-03-23 11:01 PM


and you know what's beyond that fence don;'t you! THE big field...sow those wild oats!!!!!!!!!!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Butterflies_dont_cry
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4 posted 2001-03-23 11:28 PM


And you my friend so much deserve to be a
part of a perfect team...and I also think
that any man should count himself lucky to
be a part of you....I hear the ROAR...and I
love the sound my friend...never silence it
for anyone or anything now that you've found
it...it's an awesome sound~

Temptress
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5 posted 2001-03-24 02:03 AM


Although no team is really perfect, I think you capture our own idea of perfection here very nicely. I enjoyed this very much. Maybe I'm talking to much? LOL!
Irish Rose
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6 posted 2001-03-24 02:11 AM


Had to come back and say, yes, it is an awesome sound!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Lone Wolf
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7 posted 2001-03-24 09:50 PM


faterider - I never thought of it that way!! You are right though. Thank you and happy to make you smile!

Tennessee Angel - Please, keep looking. You never know what you will find. Never give up.

Kathleen - Woo hoo!! The big field!! Yes, I know there is much beyond the fence once you get past it. LOL @ your reply. You always know how to make me smile. Thank you.

BDC - Thank you my friend. I appreciate your words more than I can say. You are a very sweet and dear woman. The ROAR is on and it will never stop because I have learned a valuable lesson . . . true love will not silence it, it will enhance it. Very important to remember. I am happy you like it. I can hear a butterfly ROAR also. Music to my ears sweetie. You also deserve to be a part of a perfect team. ~HUGS~

Temptress - I disagree. The right team is unstoppable and can conquer any obstacle. Glad you enjoyed.

Kathleen - This one's for you, baby!! ROAR!!!!!!!!!!!

Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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