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PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2001-03-23 09:43 AM

I, forced to swallow the most bitter pill,
Of the never was, and the never will
Shimmering veil of darkest cloth hides eyes
Of my muse, once more she comes to descry
She sees into the deepest depths of me
Because without her, I am incomplete
With a rush like wind through the fertile field
And sunlight cascading in my mind unsealed
My loosed thoughts pour forth haltingly at first
She stands now before me, moistened lips pursed

Far across the field, this ardent meadow
I hear a thousand trumpets start to blow
I allow myself within her shadow
Letting who I was, and never will, go

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-03-23 10:01 AM

PK - this is wonderful....so much so, in fact your muse has insisted that I place it in my library....

well done Sir....very well done....

Just A Woman
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 507

2 posted 2001-03-23 10:29 AM

Powerful depth. This is more than outstanding. I applaud. Wonderful Poetic Knight! I'm saving also.

"Often the test of courage is not to die but to live"

~Vittorio Alferi~

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

3 posted 2001-03-23 10:36 AM

This is wonderful, you do know that Balladeer's muse returned with a suntan!

This sounds the opposite but simply marvelous!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-03-23 10:42 AM

I, forced to swallow the most bitter pill,
Of the never was, and the never will
Shimmering veil of darkest cloth hides eyes
Of my muse, once more she comes to descry
She sees into the deepest depths of me
Because without her, I am incomplete
=================================
And sunlight cascading in my mind unsealed
=================================
Far across the field, this ardent meadow
I hear a thousand trumpets start to blow
I allow myself within her shadow
Letting who I was, and never will, go
============================

thy muse has returned and I am ever grateful *L*

so many cool lines in this PK ...
so many very well conceived images and poetic phrasings .....

"Of the never was, and the never will"

"And sunlight cascading in my mind unsealed"

"I allow myself within her shadow
Letting who I was, and never will, go"

and of course your ever impressive mastery of cadence and rhyme.
another excellent example of your poetic grace.

"She sees into the deepest depths of me"

me thinks that is a very very cool view

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

5 posted 2001-03-23 10:52 AM

Sun, and Just...I hope you keep room for some more. *S*

Irish, thanks, I prefer my muse to not be allowed in the sun *L*

Janet...thanks for appreciating the view as always, for whatever the view shows.

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

6 posted 2001-03-23 11:07 AM

Oh how pretty....a shadowy muse....several lines come to my mind with that little thought alone...

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

7 posted 2001-03-23 11:29 AM

Lady, those lines are.......?

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

8 posted 2001-03-23 12:30 PM

PK~ this is so cool! I enjoyed this very much

SEA

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

9 posted 2001-03-23 12:33 PM

SEA Thank you very much.

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

10 posted 2001-03-23 12:38 PM

very nice.....its funny how we really aren't complete when our muse is taking a break...you hit it perfect with this

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

11 posted 2001-03-23 01:02 PM

and I for one, am quite happy. . .

excellent my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Dee
Member Elite

since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

12 posted 2001-03-23 06:16 PM

Pk, glad she's back! Your imagery is great.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

13 posted 2001-03-23 10:08 PM

well, i won't rip this apart but that i intend to read more of your work from now on....

i love discovering new favourites...

Tennessee Angel
Senior Member

since 2000-06-03

Posts 661
Tennessee

14 posted 2001-03-23 10:36 PM

I must agree with faterider! It's so much fun to discover another favorite and I'm afraid I'm becoming something of a PoeticKnight junkie.

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite

since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

15 posted 2001-03-23 11:21 PM

Hmmmm Blue inside and out oh poetic one

...Loved the thought in this piece and the
way if flowed...very soothing and melodic....

"And sunlight cascading in my mind unsealed"

This line....beautiful imagery PK...awesome
poem~

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

16 posted 2001-03-23 11:51 PM

astonishing...
the last line is my fav... and i KNOW the feeling.

the muse returns with a vengence....

You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass.
- Frank Sinatra

"It don't mean a thing
if it ain't got that swing."

mariee66
Senior Member

since 2000-01-30

Posts 596
Recess, OfYourMind

17 posted 2001-03-24 12:37 PM

Your muse left? Well, what a return! (Mine is stil on hiatus I think!) Powerful writing.

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