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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2001-03-22 11:37 PM



As If

I walked the floors of my mind last night,
wondering when this whirl I am in
will cease to entertain me,
harboring me from the evil
that awaits...

I punished myself today,
finishing off the painfulness
from yesterday, swallowing it's thickness
till I choked and spit out
what remained...

As if that wasn't enough,
I was pricked by tomorrow's trys
bleeding clear, all that pulsed within me,
my life line of hope being drained,
leaving me clinging...


~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



© Copyright 2001 Wynter Bliss - All Rights Reserved
Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
1 posted 2001-03-23 02:16 AM


Oh my Wynter...such pain written here...you ok sweetie?
PoeticKnight
Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA
2 posted 2001-03-23 09:06 AM


wow...every line is so cool...I would really like to know what inspired this one.
Just A Woman
Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507

3 posted 2001-03-23 09:14 AM


Wynter........this is excellent writing. Powerful ending.

"Often the test of courage is not to die but to live"

~Vittorio Alferi~

Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

4 posted 2001-03-23 10:33 AM


Wow, you know you can always talk to me, anytime it just gets to be too much-
I am only a click away, I never have that much going on that I can't help a friend.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
5 posted 2001-03-23 11:52 AM


thank you all..
Paula (I am ok at this moment, huggss for caring), Poetic Knight, Just A Woman, Kathleen ..


hmmmm PK...you must not have been reading me all along, *w..I forgive you, I am one of those who writes my real life pretty much as a diary, one for my own peace of mind and two, to keep track of the events in my life, just in case.

I am no different, I have noticed from others, as I have read their comments...but after 30 years..the constant ups and downs that are occuring now when being left on my own to fight everything, solve everything, can bring me down at times...and I have developed some slight phobias (slight to me) and am working on getting over them myself..so I have to keep trying harder, so as not to lose everything...some would say to stop worrying about my home..and move on...but my home is everything to me, I have put over 21 years of my life into it and it is 100 years old this month... and I am trying hard to hold onto it...so that is my main struggle, plus jobs are becoming hard to come by as the economy is faltering...just my luck..I was born in a recession, married in a recession, bought a house in a recession...and now probably will divorce in one...

~~sighing..this is more than I wanted to repeat...but you have no email on here..*s

~Wynter/Maureen

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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