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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-03-22 09:02 PM


You and I

I am seeing
the differences
between you
and I
and all of the
alikenesses

you are the
little gem
sparkling in
a sweet young
thing

and I am the
old soul
that sits upon
the spider's
ring

you are light
and merry
and sweet
singing
mirth

while I
do my best
to warm
some
souls on earth

do I wish
to be like you?
bet your bippy
because we two
come from a
time we share
with care
we even did
some things
on a dare

and yet
you have
thought to
be like me
don't know
why
perhaps
because we
shared a tree?
or a puddle
or a diddle
something
where we
found a
middle

all I know
is that I truly care
when I read you
I feel so spare
of worry
and whatnot
as feelings rare
come to me
in Martiesque air

do you know
I admire you?
and want to
write as tho
we two
share one quill
as besets a thrill
to know a muse
who would thus
enthuse
us beyond the
beyond
where we might
go on
to share
a sky
as the sighs
come lingering
those we are
bringing in

but in the light
of me
as I look at you
I know
for real
I don't have a
clue
what it's like
to be
like you…

so I can
only
applaud
the Martie
that I see
and enjoy
those times
you read
back to me
in Sunshine
time
a little rhyme…

and certainly
I like
what I see


© Copyright 2001 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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with you
1 posted 2001-03-22 09:22 PM


This is too sweet....made me say awwww........love this....such warmth in friendship now I have tears in my eyes......SEA
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2 posted 2001-03-22 09:23 PM


What a beautiful tribute to such a wonderful woman. This is just so lovely and flowing Karilea!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Martie
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3 posted 2001-03-22 10:39 PM


Karilea--You and I are two
yet you
and I see one
so come
climb the words
and build an us
a friendship trust
the best tree
for you and me

Thank you!

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4 posted 2001-03-22 10:55 PM


see...? see? that's what
you as Martie does
plant a tree
just for we
and we'll be free
and happily
allow
all to follow
us....

in trust....

thank you my
poet friend....

Sunshine
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5 posted 2001-03-22 10:57 PM


SEA, Kit....thank you both for peeking in...my little bit of Marti-'in
for she has been a friend to me, as both of you, Kit, and SEA....

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6 posted 2001-03-22 11:50 PM


with the seed that poetry sows ...
a forest of friendship ever grows.

love this one...and the poetS that it speaks of so eloquently

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

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7 posted 2001-03-23 02:05 AM


Sweetly written...
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8 posted 2001-03-23 04:17 AM


Penned with real feeling from a lady who has a lot. I loved this. Thank you.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Wilfred Yeats
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9 posted 2001-03-23 11:20 AM


You have written a wonderful poem here - I can't think of anyone - other than you, whose poetry I think more than Marite's -
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10 posted 2001-03-23 12:37 PM


love this.....really nice writing lady
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11 posted 2001-03-23 01:19 PM


I love this. . . it's just wonderful. . . in a lovely MartieSunesque way. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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12 posted 2001-04-07 08:35 AM


JM...isn't she JUST the best?...

Thanks Paula...

Michael...our Martie is something....

Mr. Yeats, you're just saying that...

Thank you jellybeans...who ARE you anyway?

Sven, you're just making that up!

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