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green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2003-09-20 02:10 PM

I do
I can
Get the best of you
Hurt me
Break me
Run away with you

Sentiment and foreplay
I hear it deep inside
Lovely lady
Pretty girl
I dont want to see you cry

Silence and poor aptitude
Strangled with an attitude
A stencil in this world
Scribble out the heart
I rape myself and fall apart

I do
I can
Get the best of you
Hurt me
Break me
Run away with you

An impulse, sweet desire
Paradise built on fire
These feelings take away
Concentrate, a better life
I'd see you everyday

Yin to yang the atmosphere
The one you never hear
Gorgeous you
And perfect soul
A flawless body too

I do
I can
Get the best of you
Hurt me
Break me
Run away with you

Someone else, another place
I'd love you even more
could have been
Should've been
Dirty little whore

Best if I can do the most
Kiss you on your lips
Your bleeding face
Apology
My bloody finger tips

I do
I can
Get the best of you
Hurt me
Break me
Reappear without you

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

1 posted 2003-09-20 06:46 PM

Craig:

I loved this . .

I rape myself and fall apart

what an amazing line . . .
keep pouring your heart out please

xxoo

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2003-09-20 10:35 PM

The repetition in this not only drove the point home, but made gave this the essence of a piece of music.

And sue quoted my favorite line too.

Enjoyed the read m'friend.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2003-09-21 06:44 AM

Thanx littlewing, your a really good poet and I enjoy your poems too.

Thanx serenity, Actually I put some guitar riffs to it yesterday.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Insomniac Cat
Member

since 2003-09-23

Posts 69
The Land of the Dadaists

4 posted 2003-09-23 12:15 PM

I too liked the rhythym of this poem. Something you could sing or rap.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

5 posted 2003-09-24 10:44 PM

Thanx insomniac cat- its nice to see someone else enjoyed this piece.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

click1
Member

since 2003-03-25

Posts 152
usa

6 posted 2003-09-25 06:30 PM

Dude! I want to hear it!! I put my own riffs in as I was reading! Good Job!! Very well put together and looked great as I read it...

Thanx!!!

Click

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

7 posted 2003-09-26 07:30 PM

wow, this reminds me of rap or something...groovy job, lookin good bro =)

"The Red, it filters through" - Chevelle

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

8 posted 2003-09-26 07:39 PM

thanx River.

Click if you want to hear it e-mail me and after i pratice a lil bit maybe something can work out so that can happen.

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

9 posted 2003-09-29 06:29 PM

you get me every time...damn
oh, and your name is still my favorite

and even when everything was wrong, and we were mad at the world, it was still beautiful.

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