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Mad_Hatter
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0 posted 09-19-2003 09:02 PM       View Profile for Mad_Hatter   Email Mad_Hatter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mad_Hatter


Laying down across the root cracked stone
The serpentís crawling in my ear again
He thinks he has me in his clutches
But he cannot have this, cannot touch this
He cannot have the power, if Iím never letting go
Does he really burn inside, does it make him itch?
Weeping on the solid carnivore infestation
The maggots burrow in my toes again
He thinks, he thinks heís got me
Though he thinks he smells it, he does not
He cannot down my tower, with a single jagged stone
Does he really burn inside, does it make him hurt?
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1 posted 09-20-2003 03:12 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Ryan . . .
reminded me of struggle between self and reality . . .
beautiful writing
xxoo
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This was really good.. I felt the struggle with our inner demons, not sure if its intended this way or not. But i really enjoyed reading it.
Lexy
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Very graphic. I liked that, Good job with this one Hatter.
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4 posted 09-23-2003 12:10 PM       View Profile for Insomniac Cat   Email Insomniac Cat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Insomniac Cat

Root cracked stone. Nice imagery
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5 posted 09-24-2003 03:19 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I tend to have a different take on snake imagery. (and yes, sometimes it's Freudian--grin)

But...

the snake was originally a symbol of wisdom, and taken in that context, this read to me quite spiritually.

Enjoyed this very much.
Mad_Hatter
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6 posted 09-27-2003 05:01 PM       View Profile for Mad_Hatter   Email Mad_Hatter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mad_Hatter

I am not a religious person, although the snake refference is somewhat like the snake from the bible, one of temptation.  The snake in this is supposed to be the one true source of evil, the one thing in life that wants to take everything you strived to fight for away.  But if we never let go of what we believe in, then these evils cannot have our power...they cannot have what makes us human.  Thank you all for your responces.
 
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