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serenity blaze
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0 posted 09-19-2003 01:18 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

It doesn't matter if my laugh
mocks you
creeping inbetween
the fingers you have
clasped on ears
the taunting
of your bottled
beer
the way
she always
went away
the way
she sometimes
re-appeared
opening the curtains
laughing
"Damn, but it is dusty here!"

"See what happens when I go?"
She turned to Dad
and Daddy smiled
there was life
before his eyes
red hair flaming
(no surprise)
He smiled and said,
"I named you blaze."

and now I fear you think the same.


It doesn't matter if my laugh
mocks you
creeping inbetween
the fingers you have
clasped on ears
the taunting
of your bottled
beer

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eor
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since 09-26-2002
Posts 968
blues & greys


1 posted 09-19-2003 01:23 AM       View Profile for eor   Email eor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for eor

i can feel the anger...makes me want to take a step back..lol...nice write

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


2 posted 09-19-2003 09:28 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


*ducking*



Bet you feel better now!
littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 03-02-2003
Posts 9998
New York


3 posted 09-19-2003 12:09 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

nice dusting of the cobwebs K
please do this more often . . .
Love you Lady . . .
xxoo
QjQ
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since 04-18-2003
Posts 3938
U.S.A.


4 posted 09-19-2003 08:23 PM       View Profile for QjQ   Email QjQ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for QjQ

you sure expressed this well,,,

                                    

Mad_Hatter
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since 06-29-2003
Posts 397
Canada


5 posted 09-19-2003 09:04 PM       View Profile for Mad_Hatter   Email Mad_Hatter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mad_Hatter

Very well written.  You gave alot of life to this poem...I really enjoyed it.
green_itchy_stuff
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since 06-26-2003
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New Caney, Tx


6 posted 09-20-2003 04:45 PM       View Profile for green_itchy_stuff   Email green_itchy_stuff   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for green_itchy_stuff

Blazing serenity blaze with a rage.  Nice write.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

vlraynes
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since 07-25-2000
Posts 9136
Somewhere... out there...


7 posted 09-21-2003 12:26 AM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes


"She turned to Dad
and Daddy smiled
there was life
before his eyes
red hair flaming
(no surprise)
He smiled and said,
"I named you blaze."

and now I fear you think the same.


It doesn't matter if my laugh
mocks you
creeping inbetween
the fingers you have
clasped on ears
the taunting
of your bottled
beer"


Just...wow...this took me on a ride of emotions.
Very cool stuff, you...I'm with Sue...more please? smile

Love you, lady...

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Local Rebel
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since 12-21-1999
Posts 5742
Southern Abstentia


8 posted 09-21-2003 01:39 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

I named you Starr...
serenity blaze
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9 posted 09-24-2003 03:16 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

"Dark Starr" Reb?

smiles and gratitude to all for reading. And right now, I'm just trying to return the favor...

Enjoying the words of YOU ALL.
mysticpoe
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since 02-28-2003
Posts 894


10 posted 09-27-2003 10:05 PM       View Profile for mysticpoe   Email mysticpoe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mysticpoe

Nice poetry here blaze. Well written.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

 
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