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I dreamt a black dream, a dream of death

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Paragon
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0 posted 09-18-2003 08:45 AM       View Profile for Paragon   Email Paragon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Paragon


Ephemeral hauntings from an infinitesmal spectre
cloaking his presence with ethereal effluvium
asphyxiating my senses, catalysts for depravity
decussated lacerations caterwaul vermillion
as I plummet to the floor, my eyes a vacuous white
debilitated unable to disreguard his call
and languidly he came, to alleviate my pain
a tingling inebriation consumed my body
as pulsing flashes of vacancy filled my sight
intermittently the flashes slowed and the
void crept in like black ink spilled on paper.
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River
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1 posted 09-18-2003 07:00 PM       View Profile for River   Email River   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for River

this seems very interesting, but i find it hard to understand all of the big words such as; languidly, ethereal, effluvium...ect. maybe i'm just a stupid highschooler, but, i'm wondering if you used too many big words? well, whatever. it's your poem, i'm sure if i where smart enough to just look them up i wouldnt be saying  all this, lol...so i'll just shut up now, lol, but like i said, it looks interesting. groovy

"The Red, it filters through" - Chevelle

serenity blaze
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2 posted 09-24-2003 02:57 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Fortunate that such a visitation would be ephemeral.

The title drew me in, as it was so very "Poe-like"--and the impending doom and tone of suffocation spoke of an anxiety attack to me.

But then? smile, with me it's relative.

Damned near everything speaks to me of anxiety.

Try a bit of St. John the Conqueror and a nice Van Van bath with seasalt. So sayeth the witch.
littlewing
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3 posted 09-24-2003 05:17 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Paragon:
sounds like you checked out there for
a sec
*smile*
nice writing
xxoo
mysticpoe
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4 posted 09-27-2003 10:01 PM       View Profile for mysticpoe   Email mysticpoe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mysticpoe

Great last line for this very interesting and cradled write. Creative gesture and stimulating. Enjoyed.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Tourniquet
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5 posted 10-01-2003 02:34 PM       View Profile for Tourniquet   Email Tourniquet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tourniquet

I really liked this.. a Fade to Black type of feeling, of settling unconciousness...of dying. Almost like Im rotting away before my very own eyes, so aware of it, yet unable to change the fact.

Nice write.
 
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