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LXIV (Ashes in Love)

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eor
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blues & greys


0 posted 09-18-2003 02:23 AM       View Profile for eor   Email eor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for eor

The fingers of this hand with which I write-
Through those infrequent smiles which fail to live,
Can it be right to give what i can give,
Is it so that life, gives life, that gives life.

Sorrow has shut me safe in loves device
Through the ashen greys, I shudder it off-
Lift my heart up high as it on a loft,
None of these thoughts are enough to suffice

Yet, love, real love is beautiful indeed-
Iíll never give your lock of hair away-
So today, today, I will dream a day,
My love is but a dribble, a mere bead.

I lift my heart upwardly, solemnly
The ashes at my feet behold and see.
                                      
© Copyright 2003 matt cockrell - All Rights Reserved
blackhalo
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1 posted 09-18-2003 03:11 AM       View Profile for blackhalo   Email blackhalo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit blackhalo's Home Page   View IP for blackhalo

*sigh*
Perfect title.
So much that could be said about this piece.
Your every word is as an inch upon the dagger which is thrust into the heart of the lover betrayed.
And yet there is also hope in the spaces, the breaths, if you will...  As though each moment holds something with twice as much hope as was given the moment before.
Beautiful and breath-taking, you stole a few pieces of my broken heart with this poem.  I loved it.

*add*
(if you could only see how much room you take up in my library...)
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where the wild flowers grow


2 posted 09-18-2003 03:53 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

Amazing work..
SharaRose
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Somewhere out there~


3 posted 09-18-2003 11:28 AM       View Profile for SharaRose   Email SharaRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SharaRose

Just beautiful...............! Thanks for sharing with all of us.

-Shara- )


Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

[This message has been edited by SharaRose (09-18-2003 11:28 AM).]

mysticpoe
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4 posted 09-18-2003 11:38 AM       View Profile for mysticpoe   Email mysticpoe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mysticpoe

Outstanding ending eor. Your poem beginnings and endings are making you a master of what lies in between. Great write.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

green_itchy_stuff
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New Caney, Tx


5 posted 09-18-2003 12:53 PM       View Profile for green_itchy_stuff   Email green_itchy_stuff   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for green_itchy_stuff

As the others said I enjoyed this to.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

eor
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blues & greys


6 posted 09-18-2003 08:25 PM       View Profile for eor   Email eor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for eor

Alicia-thanks you, you always have something nice to say...and thanks for adding, you do take up a lot of space in my library too.

Meg-my work is nowhere near as amazing as yours, thanks for stopping by.

Terri-as always wiht the kind words, tanks you so much

Poe-thanks my man, i have been trying latley, but nothing seems to fit.  i have all these boxes i have to stay in for my classes as you can probally see form my last few posts...grrr

Craig-thanks for stopping by as alwyas

thank you everybody

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

mysticpoe
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7 posted 09-27-2003 10:39 PM       View Profile for mysticpoe   Email mysticpoe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mysticpoe

"is it so that life, gives life, that gives life. Really like this line eor.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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