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Starsfalling
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some where deep in the shadows


0 posted 09-11-2003 08:48 PM       View Profile for Starsfalling   Email Starsfalling   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starsfalling


Show me
The way to redemption
Freeing me from this sinful burden
Dragging my feet
I search for the one to forgive me
She hides from me
Forever I shall wander
And yet never once glimpse her
To do so with a smile
Is all I can hope


i lost my musical inspiration so if the ending is kinda dead you know why... but oh well i liked it

-lance

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

© Copyright 2003 Lance Keber - All Rights Reserved
Lexy
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1 posted 09-11-2003 09:48 PM       View Profile for Lexy   Email Lexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lexy

I like the end actually. It's hopeful. I like your style its pleasent to the eyes. Good job here Lance.
~Lex  

[This message has been edited by Lexy (09-11-2003 09:49 PM).]

Starsfalling
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some where deep in the shadows


2 posted 09-11-2003 10:52 PM       View Profile for Starsfalling   Email Starsfalling   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starsfalling

:-D thank you very much

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

littlewing
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3 posted 09-12-2003 02:09 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

No lance, hope is an amazing thing to possess . . .
nice job
xxoo
Endlessecho
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4 posted 09-12-2003 08:10 AM       View Profile for Endlessecho   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Endlessecho

well-written. great expressions.  Keep hope!  :-)
 
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