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savory
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0 posted 09-11-2003 01:06 AM       View Profile for savory   Email savory   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit savory's Home Page   View IP for savory


out of necessity i beg you
to give me direction
and i will obey completely
each careful instruction

lay your hands on me
point me toward security and comfort
i am surrounded by this
cold, unfamiliar place

you watched me when i gave my all
and you demanded more
with you eyes staring so intense
penetrating, and i felt my heart move inside me

knowing my tendancy to move away
you tell me to endure this ache
to explore this pain for a greater cause
so i indulge in the stillness you demand

distant and authoritative
you're holding back personally
seeming so cold
do you ever cry?

i stood on my tiptoes today
to watch you walk by
you're presise even in your stride
so set on your course that you didn't see me
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SharaRose
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since 07-19-2003
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Somewhere out there~


1 posted 09-11-2003 01:23 AM       View Profile for SharaRose   Email SharaRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SharaRose

So sad that we have to fear sometimes what a person will do next. Our hearts ride on the things they do or say to us. Their words, or actions have the ability to build us, or crush us. I wonder do they ever cry, too? I know this feeling. I know I am after reading this and you are so target on. Thanks for sharing.

SharaRose @-->--


Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

[This message has been edited by SharaRose (09-11-2003 01:24 AM).]

Endlessecho
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since 09-05-2003
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I live within myself


2 posted 09-11-2003 12:53 PM       View Profile for Endlessecho   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Endlessecho

Welcome.  I know I'm going to enjoy reading your poetry!  I was moved by this read because you have a way of putting conflicting and confusing feelings into beautiful words.  Well done!  I completely connected with this.  

Thank you.
savory
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3 posted 09-11-2003 11:58 PM       View Profile for savory   Email savory   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit savory's Home Page   View IP for savory

shara and endless, thanks for the replies they mean a lot to me
littlewing
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since 03-02-2003
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4 posted 09-12-2003 01:59 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

savory . . .
awesome writing here:

lay your hands on me
point me toward security and comfort
i am surrounded by this
cold, unfamiliar place

yes yes I do know this well
Nice entrance
Welcome to PIP!
Check your email for a greeting from all of us here
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (09-12-2003 02:13 AM).]

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