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Like the void

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Eromyna
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0 posted 09-10-2003 10:11 AM       View Profile for Eromyna   Email Eromyna   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Eromyna


Internal tearing, like the void is living, trying to escape my numbing flesh. I keep it close, bereft. I teach it how to hate what I have left, what they have left me as. I cradle poison in my chest, a beating, pulsing lump of it. It clenches tighter, makes me sweat. I play along and hold my breath. I fall; I sink and smash my head on cracking concrete pavement. But I have no regret. I would be destroyed like that. And who would be there to sadly look back? I collide with inner animals, wild. I strike them and they bite me back. I cry, bleeding pity for my own abandoned carapace.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

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Lexy
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1 posted 09-11-2003 10:07 AM       View Profile for Lexy   Email Lexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lexy

good! This definately was well done. But didn't seem to flow as well as your other work, yet the strength in your words covered up for this.

[This message has been edited by Lexy (09-11-2003 10:07 AM).]

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2 posted 09-12-2003 01:52 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Shay, amazing flow here and these are swesome lines:

I cradle poison in my chest, a beating, pulsing lump of it. It clenches tighter, makes me sweat
xxoo
 
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