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Maddy vanD
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since 2003-09-06
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Newfoundland, Canada

0 posted 2003-09-10 09:18 AM


HAUNTED

All my life I've been haunted
By the ghosts of someone else's past
And all I've ever wanted
Is to walk barefoot in the grass

Can't you hear the voices screaming
late at night, with the stars all aglow
Please don't wake me if I'm dreaming
I want to be free, I want to let go

Cut these strings that bind me
to this life full of pain
Let me drift where none can find me
Somewhere beyond the rain

By the light of day, I am crying
It ain't right, so I'm told
They say I really should be trying
but the summer sun is so cold

Your tender words are like
pouring gasoline on a fire
They bring me no relief,
they only inflame my desire

And the heart that I gave so freely
has come apart at the seams
And the need to feel something
drives us on to new extremes

So in the twilight's last gleaming
I sold my soul for whiskey and gold
And the illusion of true love
from a boy just 16 years old

© Copyright 2003 Maddy vanD - All Rights Reserved
ShannonMarie
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since 2003-09-09
Posts 55
in a state of being
1 posted 2003-09-10 10:29 PM


no improvment needed,  I liked it very much, it really speaks to me.
Endlessecho
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since 2003-09-05
Posts 398
I live within myself
2 posted 2003-09-11 12:57 PM


"All my life I've been haunted
By the ghosts of someone else's past"

I love those lines.  What a completely fitting description; I couldn't have said it better myself.  

How do we break away from paying for their mistakes?

Wonderful read!

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
3 posted 2003-09-12 02:01 AM


Maddy - fine writing here, you caught me on the first stanza:

All my life I've been haunted
By the ghosts of someone else's past
And all I've ever wanted
Is to walk barefoot in the grass

me too . . .
xxoo
  

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
4 posted 2003-09-13 08:05 PM


enjoyed this thanks for sharing

"There never was a genius without a tincture of madness."

junemac
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since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005
uk
5 posted 2003-09-14 05:02 PM


this is really good. well thought out with some clever lines. good subject too.

june x

mysticpoe
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since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

6 posted 2003-09-14 09:48 PM


Your thoughts were conveyed very nicely.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Maddy vanD
Member
since 2003-09-06
Posts 99
Newfoundland, Canada
7 posted 2003-09-17 10:34 PM


thanks all for the time to read and comment.
I agree those opening lines are some of my best,,,i was sorta afraid i couldn't follow them up, but it seems you think i did, so i ain't gonna argue with you. I wrote this while in the hospital this summer, I was in a somewhat doped up state, so I was free-associating a bit, but all in all i think it turned out pretty good.

Maddy
Poetry is not pretty....poetry is real

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