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Dark Poetry #3

To Wake Up Screaming

cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

0 posted 2003-09-07 09:07 AM

I awoke screaming
Into the nightmare
of reality
Where few survived.

Even fewer had
the will to live
in a ravaged world
where acrid, swirling
murk was our only
heritage.

The product of greed.

Where are the men
of vision,
Saviour of mankind?

Gone,in the caustic
winds of nuclear
vengeance.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

1 posted 2003-09-07 10:31 AM

Maggie OMG - you caught me like a deer in headlights in the first stanza:

I awoke screaming
Into the nightmare
of reality
Where few survived.

You are flying through these pages
xxoo

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

2 posted 2003-09-07 11:30 AM

Where there's good..there's evil. Forces at work to destroy are not the Saviour. He is the one that offers hope!!!!! I am convinced of that now more than ever. I sense the urgency in this write. Wow!

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

3 posted 2003-09-07 12:39 PM

Thank you Littlewing. That is the effect that I wanted to create. Maggie

cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

4 posted 2003-09-07 12:42 PM

Shararose, having read through the poem again I can see that I should have chosen another word for saviours.It is meant to be the government. Unfortunately we don't have an edit button or I would change it. Maggie

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