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Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina

0 posted 2003-09-03 11:17 PM


Sadness cries out to the day,
I answer I'm listening, hip hip parade,
I feel like I'm a slave to your magic,
IT always seems tragic,
Tears turn into oceans of tides,
Taking me on a long mysterious ride,
I hold on, gasp for dear life,
Like an anchor hooked to the boat,
I make it my cloak,
Sadness I cling to, soaked from head to toe,
Strange as it seems theres sometimes a gleam,
A Stream of allureness,
My lifejacket holds me afloat,
Til I seek a new vision,
Maybe even remission from this mysterious ride.

© Copyright 2003 Rose - All Rights Reserved
mysticpoe
Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

1 posted 2003-09-04 10:07 AM


Nice ending with the last line.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

[This message has been edited by mysticpoe (09-04-2003 10:07 AM).]

Lady Godiva
Junior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 35
at the bottom of your glass
2 posted 2003-09-04 05:56 PM



ohhh very interesting...took me along for the ride most definately...this flows...enjoyed..

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
3 posted 2003-09-04 10:45 PM


Rose . . . this is brilliant
every single line
outstanding writing
xxoo

Rosebud1229
Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
4 posted 2003-09-04 11:11 PM


thx for replies, sometimes those rides do take you right in with the deep sea waves,
the mind really has a heart of it's own.

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