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RennieandBoo
Junior Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 47
Florida!

0 posted 2003-09-02 09:52 PM


I'm a bride inside my eyes
Anything that I see is someone I can be
I wish I can cry every time I see you
Oh why; why did you leave me like that?
I felt my heart go down with a splat
My whole world upside down

I wish you could see
What you've done to me
You told me a lie
I could see you clearly in my mind's eye
My whole world upside down
My whole world upside down

Oh why did you leave me for another girl?
What does she got that I don't have?
I wish you could see; what you've done to me
You said you loved me
Oh how could you do this to me?

My whole world is upside down
Upside down, Upside down

© Copyright 2003 Rennie - All Rights Reserved
Encarta
Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 101
My homeland is not of the world
1 posted 2003-09-02 11:22 PM


This is a great poem...it stills sends a shiver down my spine.  you did a great job portraying the emotions.  Also, on a side note, welcome to piptalk   I'm sure you'll like this place.
littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
2 posted 2003-09-03 04:57 AM


Rennie - nice entrance!
Welcome to PIP!

I have already read you and you write
with pain but in each write I find something positive:

Anything that I see is someone I can be

EXACTLY
and yes I do know this well

Check your email for a special freeting from all of us here at Passions!
xxoo

froggy
Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893
Michigan
3 posted 2003-09-03 04:41 PM



Very pretty

:-)

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