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One Million Miles

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littlewing
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0 posted 09-01-2003 08:41 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for littlewing


White porcelin
looming
lost inside
I am
this hollow sanctuary

The water has gone cold an hour ago

The tears which grace
my face
fall freely now
salty and bitter upon my lips
have long since mingled
with water that barely shrouds
this shell
which I call myself

Standing but ten feet away
we are one million miles apart
© Copyright 2003 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
SharaRose
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since 07-19-2003
Posts 2535
Somewhere out there~


1 posted 09-01-2003 11:36 AM       View Profile for SharaRose   Email SharaRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SharaRose

Swallowed hard. Choked up is how this feels. This is not a fun place to be, and it brought tears to my eyes just to read. Sorry you have to feel this even enough to have to write it if it's not a personal experience of your own. Whoever feels this knows it's not a place to want to visit much less have to live with it, and live there.

Bless ya,
SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

green_itchy_stuff
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since 06-26-2003
Posts 1937
New Caney, Tx


2 posted 09-01-2003 12:39 PM       View Profile for green_itchy_stuff   Email green_itchy_stuff   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for green_itchy_stuff

Its almost like youre describing what its like to be dead.  Gone forever.

Craig

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Lexy
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since 01-28-2003
Posts 1049
California


3 posted 09-01-2003 07:25 PM       View Profile for Lexy   Email Lexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lexy

hmmm...gentle, deep, oddly comforting. I loved this piece. Great job.
Lex
BluesSerenade
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since 10-23-2001
Posts 9867
By the Seaside


4 posted 09-01-2003 10:58 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

Loved the ivory and your ending....
You're a solid writer tweets,  
and you're so groovy baby!!!

Liked this, lots~  
wranx
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since 06-07-2002
Posts 3778
Moved from a shack to a barn


5 posted 09-02-2003 12:03 AM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

You're not supposed to let your bath water go tepid. It's the HOT bath that relaxes!

*smile*
littlewing
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6 posted 09-03-2003 04:21 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Thank you Shara . . .
what a beautiful name you have there
This actually was last year but the memory is still much alive thank you

Craig - Goddd you got it - that's exactly how I felt thank you  

Lex - oddly comforting, yes, this place where I was in was a great place of comfort thank you

Hey Bluesy - ya saw that claw foot huh?
good eyes . . . *smile*
tweets
xxoo

Ed - *smile* I fill it up with HOT water now, it never goes cold anymore
thank you

Thanks guys
xxoo

vlraynes
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since 07-25-2000
Posts 9136
Somewhere... out there...


7 posted 09-03-2003 04:34 AM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes


Sue...feeling every word...this touches...

Hugs to you, lady...

"Deep inside this armor, the warrior is a child."
~Twila Paris

eor
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since 09-26-2002
Posts 968
blues & greys


8 posted 09-03-2003 04:34 PM       View Profile for eor   Email eor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for eor

i would make sure you always had hot water adding this

"There never was a genius without a tincture of madness."

Starsfalling
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since 03-18-2003
Posts 94
some where deep in the shadows


9 posted 09-03-2003 11:14 PM       View Profile for Starsfalling   Email Starsfalling   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starsfalling

hey wonderful write... i really enjoyed it... the ending was awesome it was the killer part, all endings have to be really good cuz they leave you with a memory of it.. if you understood that, i barely did but im sleep deprived so its ok right?
-lance
Rosebud1229
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since 04-05-2000
Posts 1829
North Carolina


10 posted 09-03-2003 11:21 PM       View Profile for Rosebud1229   Email Rosebud1229   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rosebud1229

great poem, sometimes it does seem that way, funny how being so close to someone brings distance at the same time.
mysticpoe
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11 posted 09-04-2003 10:26 AM       View Profile for mysticpoe   Email mysticpoe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mysticpoe

Real nice job w/this write lw. The flow was superb. I didn't want to pause once. Very nice reader captivation. Real nice poem.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

teenpoet
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since 10-17-2001
Posts 287
Michigan


12 posted 09-04-2003 10:27 AM       View Profile for teenpoet   Email teenpoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for teenpoet

Great poem. I'm not thinking well right now otherwise I would say more

I don't know what I did wrong but the fae are after me now. Faeries can be so irritable.

Lady Godiva
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since 09-03-2003
Posts 36
at the bottom of your glass


13 posted 09-04-2003 05:19 PM       View Profile for Lady Godiva   Email Lady Godiva   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady Godiva


You are simply amazing with your words...this Lady offically has fallen off of her horse in awe...good thing I have long hair
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since 02-20-2003
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Saluting with misty eyes


14 posted 09-04-2003 08:36 PM       View Profile for Ringo   Email Ringo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ringo

You already know my thoughts...

We are all equal but we’re individually different
and able to reach the impossible if we try.

littlewing
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since 03-02-2003
Posts 9998
New York


15 posted 09-04-2003 08:53 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Thank you so much Vicky

You are so sweet Matt - thank you

Lance, I know exactly what you mean, I call it the punch . . . thank you

Rose . . . I know kind of ironic, isnt it?
thank you

Thank you poe, the flow is so important to me

teen - you have said quite enough . . .
ahaha I never think straight thank you

Brad . . . that I do, that I do - thank you
always so sweet

Lady - my oh my . . .  well pick yourself up and dust yourself off, we dont want that hair getting mussed up now, do we?

thank you

Thanks guys
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (09-04-2003 09:57 PM).]

Dreamer@
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since 04-13-2003
Posts 40
Denmark


16 posted 09-07-2003 12:40 PM       View Profile for Dreamer@   Email Dreamer@   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dreamer@

Sometimes miles are short !

Though we dont know about it.
If maybe we sometimes just pushed abit extra i think we would win.
Though its only a thought of going to were we seek.

Nice poem

Dreamer

Life is for mee to be !

green_itchy_stuff
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since 06-26-2003
Posts 1937
New Caney, Tx


17 posted 09-07-2003 11:12 PM       View Profile for green_itchy_stuff   Email green_itchy_stuff   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for green_itchy_stuff

I just wanted to read again.

Craig

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

PouringJewels
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since 09-18-2003
Posts 161
Maryland


18 posted 09-25-2003 08:42 AM       View Profile for PouringJewels   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PouringJewels

your not tasting salty tears anymore my new found friend
click1
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since 03-25-2003
Posts 156
usa


19 posted 09-25-2003 06:18 PM       View Profile for click1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for click1

Good write...I could hear the water (tears?)  drip,---drip, Such hollow feeling...distant..Damn! I can almost smell the minerals in the water? Good Job!

                Thanx for sharing!!

Click

River
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since 09-16-2003
Posts 623
my own little world


20 posted 09-26-2003 07:40 PM       View Profile for River   Email River   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for River

*grins* need i say anything at all besides the fact that i completely agree with everyone that has already posted? lovin it sis. God Bless.

"The Red, it filters through" - Chevelle

 
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