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mysticpoe
Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883


0 posted 2003-08-28 11:40 AM




now a shell
his ego sucked out,
long ago
stumbling
cruel passages of
massaged concrete,
showing years
that ate the layers.
one by one
perfect chariots - waited
and called their day
their way
colored in desire,
mixed with hues
their colors also
the colors we knew
this man showed
no color.
no one noticed
the shame,
drained from special
servings
no hues, was his name.
brightly colored egos
eager to move on,
they lose
the moments meaning
of life’s beyond.
for every soul committed
and every page done,
the book
we all have entered reads.
our passing -
for the total sum.

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

© Copyright 2003 mysticpoe - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
1 posted 2003-08-29 01:09 AM


Jesus poe . . .
this is brilliant . . .
reminded me having my brain sucked dry
by society . . .
xxoo

cusick
Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668

2 posted 2003-08-29 05:52 AM


This poor man seems to be in torment and nobody cares. A very interesting read. Maggie

mysticpoe
Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

3 posted 2003-08-29 08:50 AM


Thanks again littlewing. society did do a job on this person, sad. thanks again for stopping by.

mysticpoe

maggie, a little bit of us in that old man and a little bit of him in us. left for who to, dare care. Then it will be our turn in some way? Thanks for stopping by again.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

eor
Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
4 posted 2003-08-29 03:39 PM


littlewing said what i am thnking, brillant, absoutly brillant, adding this fo sure!

"There never was a genius without a tincture of madness."

click1
Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 152
usa
5 posted 2003-08-30 06:31 PM


"no hues,was his name"
  Well said!  I love the relation it brought to mind.....  Thanks!

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