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Magebeast
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since 2000-07-19
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0 posted 2003-08-26 01:03 AM


Five Knights rode out to field
Their armour shone, pristine white
Standing out against the emerald green grass
To sight there was nothing purer
Bright blades like shards of light hung at side
They road out, out on emerald field
T'wards dark beast, of pain and hate
Apathy and fear.

The first rode towards it, unslung its blade.
And the beast regarded him with one eye,
"You fear," It spake. "No..." groaned Knight
With fear in his heart, he swung
Was blocked, and died.

The second Knight rode out,
The beast regarded him with one eye,
"You can hurt," it spake. "No!" screamed Knight
He swung and felt the pain of life
He was blocked, and felled.

Out Thundered third.
The beast regarded him with one eye,
"You hate," it spake. "No!" raged Knight
He swung with blinded anger
Was blocked, and destroyed.

The fourth moved out
The beast regarded him with one eye,
"You care not," it spake. No answer.
The Knight swung without care,
was blocked and passed away.

The final Knight rode out
Clothed in Light but knew himself inside
The beast regarded him,
"You fear and hate and hurt,"
"And you knew my secret,"
"But cared not save fellow knights"
"Yes" spake simply the Knight

The Knight took his shard of light
reversed it, and drove the blade deep
deep into his own breast, and the beast screamed.
There they died. Beasts all. Darkness all

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Its been some time since I posted here...

© Copyright 2003 Daniel Swan - All Rights Reserved
mysticpoe
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since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

1 posted 2003-08-26 09:12 AM


Nice change, enjoyed the read.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
2 posted 2003-08-26 07:50 PM


Daniel:

ahhh this was awesommmme
I never expected that ending
i thought for sure the last knight was the one
*wicked smile*

battle never won
awesome job
xxoo

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
3 posted 2003-08-27 12:22 PM


wow!!! fantastic write, you left me wanting more and more, i really think this could be a great short story, thanks for sharing

"There never was a genius without a tincture of madness."

ShadowRaven
Member
since 2003-08-13
Posts 51

4 posted 2003-08-27 01:34 AM


Ye Gods! That was brilliant! Loved it!

[This message has been edited by ShadowRaven (08-27-2003 01:35 AM).]

Mad_Hatter
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since 2003-06-29
Posts 393
Canada
5 posted 2003-08-27 01:42 AM


Very wonderful poem.  I loved that ending, it was so anti-cliche, very refreshing.  Great stuff.
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