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beneath the shell |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
I know somewhere beneath my metal shell There are wings, waiting to spread I find myself jammed between mountains I never meant to start a war I just said what I said so that I could Feel like I was something more I found myself jammed between oppression I ripped myself a brand new hole So I could remove the tin can That they gave me for a soul I didn’t want a VCR for a mouth Or a number on my neck I wouldn’t let you stick another tape in Or control my life with the prick Of your super control pin Are we really living or are we just giving Back what they put in I know somewhere beneath my metal shell There are wings, full of thorns |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Nice write MH, felt this. Nice compared to's. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
"I never meant to start a war I just said what I said so that I could Feel like I was something more" i know the feeling, slience can be a killer within yourself, but it sucks when you get it out and ww3 starts, anywasy good write "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ryan . . . this is awesome! brilliant write . . . reminded me of society and their clutches like a puppet . . . strings subterfuge . . . and yes, there are wings, thorns? hmmm . . . I don'tknow about that *smile* xxoo |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
This was just, wow, a really really awesome post! I loved the rythym and the write! Thanks for sharing! ~Alicia |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Thank you all for your posts. The wing thing was just a metaphor for hope. It's like there may be hope somewhere beneath my metal shell, but that hope is dangerously damaged. Thanks again, you're all so wonderful. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
wow, um. This is amazing. There are almost no words to describe how well done this was. I like the robot type feel. I see a lot of metal and greys. It was an excellent write, that I will safe and read again and again I'm sure. Thanks.  |
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