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She Says |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys 
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This poem is in no way about suicide or death, take the words in this metaphorically, not literally...please She says come on come on I don't know if this is real or fake Best friend I say let’s slow down You don't know if this is real or fake Best friend but So, come on come on You initiated this Best friend cause I Am I able to handle this all? I really don't think so Best friend but you get So I say come on come on Let’s just get this over with Best friend cause I pulled the So do I deserve this all? I can’t take this anymore Best friend but you get what you Now I say back off back off This life is too precious Best friend cause I pulled the trigger Best friend but you get what you get what you deserve Best friend cause I pulled the trigger Best friend but you get what you get what you deserve "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
it's like a song..to me.. playing in my head.. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
nice write. a trickle of music from a well |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
You've amazed me yet again. Stunning words. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thanks everyone "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Interesting eor, rough week? the repetitive ending lines gave the write real substance. Nice write. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
rough week mixed wiht partying that night, and stupid things in my head...but thanks poe. "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
I like the flow and the rythym of this... And the phrases get longer as you head toward the end, that's usually how it goes, huh? This was quite the piece, I really enjoyed it! ~Alicia |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thank you "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Kaoru had a point that is quite obvious I think, it is like a song. Add. GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Matt - as in you cant take the pain alone, yet want it to be gone . . . not one person is to blame . . . I do understand xxoo |
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