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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-08-19 02:57 AM

Take me
away

to that
big sand
castle
in the sky..

tell me
that
the shadow
of the moon
is
merely
following
me to
watch me cry..

so many times
i questioned
the motives
of the
aura
that surrounds
us..
talking to myself
aloud
I think
I'm better at conversing
alone..

So
i'm damned if
i do
damned if
i don't..
so
why not do both?

keep my head up
and
everyone elses..
pay the toll..

watch heads roll.

I've never made much
sense to myself but I figure..

it's probably better that way..

just like if
the stars never wept
then
there probably
wouldn't be a sky
today.

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

1 posted 2003-08-19 10:19 AM

Very nice.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

2 posted 2003-08-19 10:35 AM

you make sense to me gal.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

3 posted 2003-08-19 12:18 PM

makes perfect sense to me, too, and truthfully that in itself is scary!!!!!!!!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-08-19 12:44 PM

or if the stars wept..we would see the sky much more clearly.. the tears having washed away the dust of ages and experience still lingering in heavens orb..

nice write... and some truly enjoyable images and lines.

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

5 posted 2003-08-20 11:36 PM

wow this is fantastic, i don't know how i missed it
"so many times
i questioned
the motives
of the
aura
that surrounds
us..
talking to myself
aloud
I think
I'm better at conversing
alone.."

this is so powerful, fantastic, absoulty fantastic write!

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

6 posted 2003-08-21 04:25 AM

Ive been having a bad bit of fortune lately and I think this says it pretty much the way it is. NIce write. I enjoyed it quite a bit and axtually feel a lil better, not that you seem to feel this way but that im not the only one. Which is kind of selfish but, its honest. Again nice write.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

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