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eor
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0 posted 2003-08-16 07:00 PM



Damn I don’t think it is fair or right
What am I not good enough to meet you old friends?
What the f, any night but tonight
What the f does that mean

I would jump at the chance to have you meet my old friends
And plus you are not going to come home tonight
Of course I said 'be good'
You gave me a look as if to spite me

I hope for our sake you don't spite me
The rage inside me
I mean space is one thing but
Getting waisted with old friends and not wanting me there
What the hell am I supposed to think?
Flowers and candy, a f-ing tea party

All I want to do is scream out loud
Am I not good enough, huh, am I, HUH!
DON'T F-ING PLAY WIHT ME
I’m way to fragile
See I am already breaking


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sorry, this just happened like 2 seconds ago, i needed my thearpy...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

© Copyright 2003 matt cockrell - All Rights Reserved
mysticpoe
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1 posted 2003-08-16 07:35 PM


Hey eor, been there, done that. Don't want to kill you with cliches right now. But this is realy in your face stuff. I think I'll make a copy to forward. Outstanding emotional outlet-i-n-g.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

green_itchy_stuff
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2 posted 2003-08-16 09:09 PM


Intense.  I like it.  But of course I would.  hehe.  Another addition.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Lexy
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3 posted 2003-08-16 10:33 PM


well I know how it is, when you JUST go through something and your mind is screaming you just just scribble it all down. Your anger shows. I liked this. So human.

Kaoru
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4 posted 2003-08-16 11:04 PM


Man, that just ain't cool.. but the poem is..
eor
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5 posted 2003-08-17 02:12 AM


damn i love you all for the fact you understand me...thank you so much...you all mean more to me than you know

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

green_itchy_stuff
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6 posted 2003-08-17 02:41 AM


Human indeed.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

eor
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7 posted 2003-08-17 03:19 AM


i dont know if i am human at all, sometimes i feel like an outsider

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

SharaRose
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8 posted 2003-08-17 08:26 AM


Outsider? But?  Well I just think it's better to get it on the outside than it is to keep it in, and it shares with the rest of us to remind us we aren't the only ones that feel this way. That's purpose, and that's reason for you!! I know your writes always make me feel someone out there understands. Which *always* helps!!
SharaRose @--<--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

eor
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9 posted 2003-08-17 10:45 AM


Thank you!

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

blackhalo
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10 posted 2003-08-26 01:13 AM


*no legible letters to describe the noise I made, at least not in a very strange way...*  This piece was amazing, I love the structure and the flow, and VERY well driven!  Yet again, *astounded*  Add.  (Not much of yours I've read ISN'T in my library...  How'd I miss this one?)
~Alicia

cusick
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11 posted 2003-08-26 09:02 AM


Let no one put you down Eor, stand up and be counted. Maggie

mysticpoe
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12 posted 2003-08-26 09:07 AM


I hope you'll over this, I'm ready to read again. later

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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13 posted 2003-08-26 07:46 PM


Matt -
nice vent and no, it isnt cool at all
I understand your ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
*smile*
xxoo

click1
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14 posted 2003-08-26 08:58 PM


sooo proud of them...so embarassed by us..where do we fit in??  nice job of telling it like it SOMEtimes is... and again, well done...

                         thanx!

Click

Magebeast
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15 posted 2003-08-26 09:14 PM


Awesome.  That's a feeling I can relate too...
eor
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16 posted 2003-08-27 12:02 PM


Alicia-thanks as always, i'm not sure why so much of my stuff is in your library, but thanks!


Maggie-Thanks, i'll try, but sometimes it is hard


Poe-of course tthanks for stopping by, mucho apreaciated!!

Littlewing-thanks, sometimes you gotta get these things out, and passions is my thearpy, thanks for listening!!

Click1 and Magebeast-thanks for stopping by, this is the first u have seen of you two, thanks!!!!

THANK YOU ALL!!

"There never was a genius without a tincture of madness."

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