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Rain, rain |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. 
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Rain, rain 8/14/03 Rain, rain Go away Come again Another day My body hurts And my heart’s in pain Your dreary fall Can only stain I need a break I need to rest Because all day I do my best Yet no one sees And no one hears All the symptoms Of my fears But I sit and stare I sit and listen And I can sense All your bitchin’ Our fights I bare Your screams I stand And silence it seems I can never demand Though now it hurts Each new coming day To live the life That seems to stay It seems to me The sky is black Every time You turn your back What must I do To make you see What perfect is I’ll never be You’ll always see My hardest try But life is not A piece of pie Rain, rain Go away Come again Another day This is it I think I’m through Doing the best That I can do. ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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ShadowRaven Member
since 2003-08-13
Posts 51 |
Hmm, I posted a reply to this but it came out as a new topic. *shrugs* Knowing me I probably clicked on the wrong link. Anyway - I loved it. Raven xo |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
This is great!! I can truly relate to ur words!!  ELMO"No man is EVER worth my tears, and the one who is, will never make me cry!" |
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BigFlamingClyde New Member
since 2003-08-14
Posts 3Mississippi |
"I sit and listen And I can sense All your bitchin’ Our fights I bare" I think pretty much everyone has been in one of those unfortunate situations before. It's also really easy to feel as if you're dragging a relationship around by its feet or carrying it on your shoulders. heh heh, and I like the quotationed rhyme at the top! Thanks! - The Big Flaming Clyde |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
I was going to include my favorite part of this poem in the reply...but that would mean that I had to include the whole thing. This poem was beyond beautiful. Definitely a new favorite of mine. I don't usually visit this forum...but I believe I might begin. I hope you don't mind me putting this in my library for future reading! Beautiful work.  "I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..." |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
good write, you kept a good flow through the whole poem... "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Keep your head up. Doing your best is all anyone can ask!  SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
i tried to read this before but it wsa just two replies. Good poem, nice flow and good way of saying what was said. GIS a trickle of music from a well |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
Don't despair, when you are feeling down the only way to go is up. Maggie |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Tanya . . . you are doing your best . . . trust me on this . . . *smile* xxoo |
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