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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-08-10 02:19 AM


Hey, if
something's walking
midnight stalking..
a velvet pose tranquil
insomniac..

my heart burns with fire when you
forget simple words.
small lingering
twinge of air bursts through
the warm way that whispers,

we..

we..


sea breeze
creeps
imposing veiw I stumble
across the sky.

holding my arms,
a bird
a song
sweetly sung by not..
rusted mirror lining
silver
tongue intruding
my words
silent and persuing..

stalking a
midnight cloud.


© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
green_itchy_stuff
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New Caney, Tx
1 posted 2003-08-10 02:33 AM


Wow.  I love the way you think.  Thats beautiful.  Give me more.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2003-08-10 09:52 AM


Meg,

Very nicely done...

Susan

Tiersdin
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east coast
3 posted 2003-08-10 10:11 AM


Beautiful words, Meg.

I love this.


~Tier

ecrivan
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4 posted 2003-08-10 10:11 AM


Meg,

nice choice of words and clipped phrases


Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
5 posted 2003-08-10 03:33 PM


this is what im talking about, disjointed images that you somehow shape together and it makes perfect sense in the end
eor
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blues & greys
6 posted 2003-08-14 12:58 PM


"my heart burns with fire when you
forget simple words."
finally someone gets it, where have you been all my life?

great write adding this

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

inkedgoddess
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7 posted 2003-08-24 10:41 PM


makes sense when you put it all together,
intricate yet the message is there

littlewing
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8 posted 2003-08-24 11:17 PM


sounds to me like you were flying there for a bit Meg
xxoo

ShadowRaven
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9 posted 2003-08-24 11:48 PM


Very nice indeed. Beautiful
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